MY CRAZINESS

MY CRAZINESS  "

 

……….BY SADDAM HUSEN

 

 

Is it my craziness!
You are not here, at eventide
but you are with me, by my side.

 

Darkness is here, dilapidation lights
Coral dawning sun, smiling
and ogling on me, as saying -"Illusion is now over."

 

Lydian and Dalian shy winds
gyrating at me, as susurrus to me
"Feel your girl over here, catchy."

 

Amazingly I can feel her hand over my face
sliding over and again wobbling

Warm blow of her and sweet mist;
but open eyes, there were stars--
Moon with mini transparent clouds.

ã"v"ã

Reviews

Not one of my favorites of yours... but I can understand what you are trying to convey... its like you were in a hurry to get this one out or... the emotion was so big you were struggling a bit... I do see great hope for it to evolve as your other writing has often stirred me...

[Kasey Miriam]

This poem is by far not your best. It's quite vague and is not as eye catching as most I your other poems. Good try.

[Oyindamola Shoola]

this is filled with much emotion....nice poem

[Ally Monique]

Is there any significance behind the orange border or is it purely for decoration? Also, what's the "ã"v"ã" i've never seen it before haha
Great ink!

[Persona]

Ok, so it's a romantic poem but there are nicer ones around. I like your vocabulary. It's a good attempt. The imagery isn't totally clear.

[Ruth]

Intense imagery...powerful emotion...I enjoy your work x

[Susan Beth Horvath]

You did a very good job with this. I enjoyed the read

[Sophy Freebirds]

I would agree with Rene salinas it is not a sonnet its a poem of a single stanza containing fourteen lyrical lines in iambic pentameter. They are of two types but i will not go into that.. It is a nice poem though.. the dreams which become our obsession beautifully depicted in your poem.

[audrie]

I think that deep love can bring about the crazies in people. . .nice descriptives

[Matching Socks]

i think that the craziness is subtly bordering on obsession.
we feel what we need and then crave it so much that we can't stop thinking and wanting