LOST IN LOVE

LOST IN LOVE

                            -SADDAM HUSEN

 

Everything has lost

Mine, for only your lust

A visual less string fast

                                    Heart is finding you just.

 

Precious jewels-solitaires

 Makes no happiness-joy

Hold my life your souvenirs

A loom-gloom melancholy.

 

Through my casement

When I widely open it

For a no time spent

A blow came a yest.

 

You, with a light pole

Looking for your only bus

I, with my heart pale

Looking for your cares.

 

Winkly, I’m try to feel your sedent   nature

            Fervor festal blow in my mind heart mature

                        Avowed you, I thank deeply my Maker

                                    But soon it ends like a banter.

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Love isn't lust it has nothing to do with it. Lust is when one Lust after something they can't have and are not meant to have. Lust it isn't pure at all. Love is pure and innocent and carefree and gentle. carefree like the innocence's of a Child it is the Butterflies Fluttering in your stomach. true love is Christ dying on the cross for our sin's. You have given me an idea for a poem thank you I will post it

[Saddam]

Thank you so much for this dear. Sure love is not lust, I think I must re-write this, One of my friend has suggest to do so.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're welcome.

[alf]

Hi. This has the basics of a really good write and there are places where I know what you are trying to say, but perhaps you have overtired a tad here and there. I should love to look at this again, should you ever decided to re-write, alf

[Saddam]

Of course, suggestions and correction is always welcome, I know I'm little tight in this language. So please.

[Penny]

The poem is really good but the title, I think should be worked upon, the poem potrays selflessness of love while the title is lust.

[Saddam]

thanks... You are right.... can you suggest some suitable....at the time i was little bit confussed too... please

[Penny]

My pleasure. And I think 'Lost in love' would be nice title. What say?

[Saddam]

pleasurly i changing my title with you. thanks dear friend.

[Tina Louise UK]

Beautifully done Ssad :) x

[Saddam]

thank you very much dear friend... and your image is very beautifull and innoicent...love that.

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is lovely Ssadd quite a touching poem :)

[Saddam]

Thank you ma'am. i am very glad.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome my friend :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are lusting and misting along with testing...lol
A wonderful write...:)...............

[Saddam]

I apreciate you sir..thanks a lot....

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...............

[MadBubbles]

I love it! Its so, hearfelt.

[Saddam]

Your words making me crazy dear. Mujhe khusi hai...thank you very much...

[MadBubbles]

your welcome, and I thank you for blessing me with captivating words, which are yours.

[Saddam]

Much pleased words are your dear...love you.