FOR MOON PERAMB
A Poem by Saddam
FOR
MOON PERAMB
-SADDAM
HUSEN
Gaiety
No
society
Only
my beauty.
Quiver
Flowing
water
Edge
of river
With
you at weir.
Round
And
round
With
your jocund.
Blither
Strange
eager
Flowery
fragrant shower
Till
the evening star.
Talk
Which
knock
To
end heart.
Ear
ball
Mine enthrall
Your
sweet call
As
easy snow fall.
Distress
Little
silence
Even
small distance.
Tramp
Hand
inhand
For
moon peramb
Away
from this land.
© 2014 Saddam
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love it this Flow's beautifully. nice work Blessings
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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10 Years Ago
Thanks dear....have a nice day.
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I like this you have a real way with words:)
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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10 Years Ago
Thank you dear friend. Your poetry is also very good. I like them.
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10 Years Ago
Thank you lots and your very welcome:)
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Beautifully written. The flow is great. A very well worded piece of work. Keep writing. Good luck and have a nice day.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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10 Years Ago
Dhanyawad dost. mujhe badi khusi hai. Thank you very much.
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You are definitely growing as a poet. The title is just magical and the text very subtle. Well done.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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10 Years Ago
Thank you very much dear friend. That all the part of my experiments. And glad you like it.
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I like your choice of words, well penned. It flows wonderfully. Great poem.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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10 Years Ago
Thank you very much dear friend.
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High spirited and light hearted, I enjoyed your word play here Ssadd.
Blither
Strange eager
Flowery fragrant shower
Till the evening star.
Nicely pen'd.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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10 Years Ago
thanks a lot dear....this all give me a new look for create. thank you very much.
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This somehow reminded me of something i'd written a long time back. Very compelling choice of words!
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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You have penned a most interesting piece my friend :)
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
thank you very much...still i'm learning.
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10 Years Ago
You are welcome and we must always keep on learning :)
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Very interesting word choice...Bravo................
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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10 Years Ago
thank you sir....means i'm on right track...thanks for all support.
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10 Years Ago
Yep. You are welcome...:).......................
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Wonderful read, I especially like the last verse well done Ssadd
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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10 Years Ago
thank you sir....means i'm improve in myt work... thanks for all your encouragement.
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Added on March 4, 2014
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SaddamRASRA, BALLIA, Uttar Pradesh, India
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