STILL I THOUGHT

What kind of beauty she was?

Still I thought.

What kind of heart she has?

Still I thought.

 

Beauty, so soft and so light

So fair and so sweet;

Heart, so kind and so hard

So dear and so quite.

 

Have she ever any kind of cross

Still I thought.

 

One day she turned to me and say

“Why are you so sad?

The world is nothing, feel happy and gay

Misery or sorrow is very bad.”

 

What happened that day and on?

Still I thought.

 

 

 

 

Follow days, I repeat her every act

“I am copying you”

Repeatedly one cloudy morning I react

“I am loving you.”

 

For propose, was that good cause?

Still I thought.

 

She turned round with tearful eyes

“This is not possible

There is one, who makes me nice

I am not your able.”

 

Why the world, that day, not become dark?

Still I thought.

Since that day, I am burning in hell

My heart is beating in pain

When I heard about her or tell

I used to cry, then.

 

Can she change her decision rock?

Still I thought.

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Reviews

You voice in this one, managed to say and show what many of us have experienced... The reality of two that don't quite feel the same at the same time and yet not ready to let go. Very nice job indeed...

[Piper]

So raw and down to earth! I love it!

[Ana B.]

Well done, while you still thought about her, she was doing the same.... :)

[audrie]

I really liked the way it is placed liked a story - nice piece! Thanks for the share

[MariaDahl1791]

well written, thought provoking

[vaishnavi]

well written poem with all emotions :)
thanks for sharing and keep on writing and sharing

[kublakhan27]

A lot of mystery surrounds this dark lady, wherever she has come from...this is the proverbial Femme Fatale...well done my friend :)

[Frieda P]

A few grammatical errors to edit, other than that, this one is chock full of angst and longing, good job Ssadd.

[Honey-Bee]

Lovely! Keep up the good work!

[Cory Barrett]

Isn't it they way. We always find ourselves thinking about how to save others.