MY MISSED GIRL

Though all over the world

There was spread moon’s snow

But I’m aimlessly was about to go

Empty heart and soul was burning.

On my mood, suddenly a wind whirl

The wind; I have never feel before

My eager eyes start running in wonder

In the wood a light was shining.

 

Curly hair and white dress girl

With qualm foot was coming towards me

Her eyes was like sky deep blue

Over her, butterflies were halting.

 

She come so close, entwines and kissed

 She was my love, who was missed.

Reviews

[Blue]

I like the overall picture portrayed, Ssadd. I'm just wondering... Are the grammatical errors intentional? Like in...

"suddenly a wind whirl"
"But I’m aimlessly was about to go"

and other parts as well?

I've read poems that defy grammar rules and I'm wondering if this is one of them?

[star73]

sweet and romantic i love romantic poems that touch my heart and soul.

[Saddam]

thank you very much friend you like it...

[Vidya Bacchus]

Such poetic romance my friend.You are a true romantic :)

[Saddam]

thank you dear friend...

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome .

[SAYED THANGAL]

a real love poem with all its feelings, the images are appealing

[Saddam]

thank you sir for your encouragement words.

[Rehan Roy]

'Curly hair...her eyes were sky deep blue..entwines and kissed ' I like the way you write in...a romantic flow.

[Saddam]

thanks alot dear friend....i'm glad that you like my expression....feels good. thank you very much.

[Saddam]

thanks alot dear friend....i'm glad that you like my expression....feels good. thank you very much.

[Rehan Roy]

It's my pleasure, dear friend.

[Sami Khalil]

Sweet, lovely and romantic...:).....................

[Saddam]

thank you very much.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).............................

[costa siwale]

An awesome piece, just how a poem should read..mesmerizing

[Saddam]

thank you dear friend for giving this your precios time.

[costa siwale]

Any time, your work speaks for itself

[Penny]

What a mystical yet romantic piece. Looks like you are inspired by Keats or so. Nice poem

[Saddam]

yes i am big admirer of john keat's LA BALLE DAME SANS MERCY. i had made it hindi version to... thanks a lot dear.

[Tina Louise UK]

A lonely heart can inspire beautiful poetry...enjoyed :) x

[Saddam]

thank you dear friend for giving it your time.

[AYVID N]

This poem was like a love song. Very well written and much appreciated Ssadd....

[Saddam]

thank you dear friend for your words...