PROMISES

PROMISES

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Today

Last day

Still coming day

I have my promises

With you for my happiness

Though without you I’m loneliness

Promise, live with your wound of betray

Promise, live without you as wind of eerie

Promise for remembering you in my rescue, maze, cry.

Reviews

[Sindu]

Nice format of writing, Saddam! I like it and the expressions too.

I am little confused with the last line... rescue, maze (?), cry ( may be some other word here?)

In eight line, don't you think wound of betrayal sounds better? Unless you want to go with the flow :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear...

[Ana B.]

A beautiful write, full of promise indeed. Love the style and arrangement. Amazing :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much sweet friend.

[Kousika]

great style.. I enjoyed...

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear

[nazia]

Format is beautiful, it provides a character to your work or rather say the promises you have such lovingly made. Nice write Saddam.

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend..

[Jeyanthi]

I like this tomb format. :D
The last three you featured how we live with broken promises. Beautifully expressed. :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear.

[Chris]

Perhaps I've missed the mark but at the moment this left me a bit confused. My mind isn't feeling the words linking cohesively - likely its just me... sorry.

[Saddam]

Honest review and don't need to be sorry...

[AaronFreitas]

Nice one Saddam! Really liked this one :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear.

[Mitali Shah]

good one Saddam, indeed a Promise pyramid for each day

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear

[prajakta]

a sweet one:-)nice write..

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear

[Ruth]

Lovely structure...delight to read ♥

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear.