A SPLENDID MANNER

I want to feel you in me
Over the bed; at one pillow
Our hand glued in insane
And your rabid hand at my hollow.

I want to teach a lesson
A manner, with a splendid way
You may be informal on your provoke
And full with your frank verve.

I want to rambled my hand
On your whole form; specially on chest
I shall show you my virtue
You will be forced to do your best.

I don't want to describe this time;
I want to stipulate your drifting lime.

Reviews

[Rheeca Verons]

I'm a pervert -_-... I don't know why but it feels too graphic for me. The word you used were vague but precised in meaning. Why do I think like this? Romantic, yes. Erotic in such ways, yes. Splendid, hell yeah! In my case, I had visualized ever details...I may really be a pervert.

This is a really great piece.

[Saddam]

thanks dear for your compliments....i'm too glad dear...

[Vidya Bacchus]

Sensual and romantic my friend.Well penned :)

[Saddam]

thank you very much, your compliments are made good effect on me. thank you.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Well thank you and you are welcome for sure :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A most descriptive and relative piece, great imagery, well done, good read.

[Saddam]

THANK YOU DEAR FRIEND.

[Sami Khalil]

"I shall show you my virtue
You will be forced to do your best."
Those lines stood out to me dear poet in this beautiful and sensual poem...Pen on...:)...................

[Saddam]

Thank you sir very much...I will...

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...................

[Penny]

A little sensual. But who cares how our emotions flow when we long for someone. A nice write

[Saddam]

Thank you dear friend, you like it.

[Penny]

My pleasure.

[Sue Hart]

It had a taste of erotica. Some of the choices of words lost me, but over all it was good.

[Saddam]

thank you very much dear. I used my best words in my understanding but if you think there must be change, I appreciate that, then please show me my short, so that next time I tried my bestest best. thanks

[Julie Spade]

"I don't want to describe this time; I want to stipuaye your drifting lime" OMG that is grand line! It made me have a different perspective on romantic poems and your personal experiences and how you express it through words! I really like this ! :)

[Saddam]

thank you dear.. thanks for this flowing comment.

[AYVID N]

A poem with a difference...that's how I felt when I read it...it somehow left me refreshed.

[Saddam]

Thank you very much dear poet....

[Shaquana Adams]

I smiled at the end of this poem. Very nice flow. Good work :)

[Saddam]

thank you dear friend.