Fleur-de-Lis

I saw a portrait of mine 

On that wall which was shine 

The frame was gold plated 

And picture was absolute fine. 

 

 I have a beautiful human nest 

 At where all is luxury and rest 

 Elegance aura, beautiful view and cute moon 

 Everything which, for a man, is best. 

 

But here I am painfully restless 

I always see my dark shadowy face

Which laughs at me and shakes me- 

"Coward! You! You had left FLEUR-de-LIS. 

 

In heavy rain and thunder 

 Only look you with eyes wonder 

 Under that usual tree, dreaming 

 But you left her, with deep scar.

 

Author's Note

FLEUR-de-LIS: The royal badge of old FRANCE, A Iris flower, The flower of the lily, Beautiful one.

Reviews

[Justin Xavier Smith]

There's a lot to unpack in this. I think the style of writing really adds to the piece. The English isn't perfect but that seems almost to benefit the meaning and tone of the poem, so I wouldn't change any of the grammar or anything. It feels very real and honest. And it paints a vivid picture of place, and there is solid emotion. So I say... good job!

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend. If there is any issue please be free and point out. It is the way to learning, and I am a leaner. Glad you like it.

[Sindu]

Wonderful write! everything adds to it, the words, rhyming and flow- all that emotion beautifully captured. It starts so simple and I love this :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear............ Your reviews are encouraging.

[Deepika]

Nice poem! Filled with emotions ! Good job!

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend.....

[MomzillaNC]

The English still needs a bit of finessing. But your themes and the flow of ideas carries the reader into that moment of reflection, looking back from the comfort of now on regrets and sacrifices made on the journey.

[Saddam]

Thanks a lot dear friend... It means lot for me. You are very supportive, I am just trying my best.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. Keep it up.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

This starts so cute, and leads onto serious with a window into your surroundings and what you think and ponder on.
Nice writing.

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear..... I am glad.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome :)

[katja]

definitely a lovely flow to your words SSADD ...
... there's darkness & melancholy woven through the pretty imagery of moonlight & flowers & this is something i adore in anything i read
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thank you for sharing
~katja

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend.

[Lyndy]

I love this poem! hahha. :D Beautiful font!

[Saddam]

Thank you so much friend.

[Raja Anjana Kothapalli]

Wow! Kudoz to you, SSADD!

Your Fleur-de-Lis is an excellent piece of poetry!

Loved it

-Anjana

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend. Your words are amazing.

[Carol Phelan Aebby]

A beautiful write with a lovely flow.

Wishing you creativity in abundance!

With respect and smiles,
Carol Phelan Aebby

[Saddam]

Those are most valuable suggestions dear friend. Thank you so much for your all read and attention.

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethi..]

stunningly written words on FLEUR DE LIS:) bravo:)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much friend.

[Tiana]

Wonderfully written, SSADD ... Enjoyed your poem :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear.