SPECIAL FEELING

Let me wake up 

Wake up from this role 

Now a days, I was in sleep 

A hidden flame is burning in my 

heart And it hits me hard. 

I admit my state 

My loneliness has flew away 

And a strange eagerness is on 

Although, next moment, I hurled it out 

But it make me plight. 

When I look you My heart began to loud 

After your soul-stirring smile 

I feel much special and want to always 

And try to stand all the ways. 

From my third eyes I follow you 

Found you in my vision 

Under a big arm tree, middle of green grass 

Where slow wind pass. 

When I think you 

Oft, fleeting clock stopped 

My heart looking for your presence 

For your hug, for your smile_tear and twinkled eyes 

All I recall when I rise.

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

not so sure on the Third eye part.
but this has a touch of Romance to it
very nice I am a Romantic. love these lines.
When I think you

Oft, fleeting clock stopped

My heart looking for your presence

For your hug, for your smile_ tear and twinkled eyes

All I recall when I rise.

[Saddam]

third eye means my feelings, my emotions. Thank you very much for read.

[MomzillaNC]

Very romantic sentiments

NOTES:
"My loneliness has [flown] away"

"But it make me plight."
Grammatically, I can't make sense of the above line. Maybe, you meant [But, this is my plight]

"When I look [at] you, My heart [beats] loud"

"I feel [more] special and want [you] always"

"From my third [eye] I follow you"

"Where the slow wind will [pass].

"Oft, fleeting clock stopped" I wasn't sure what you were trying to say here. If you meant that you think of her often and that fleetingly, it seemed time itself has stopped, maybe you could rephrase the line.

[Deepika]

Nice work Ssadd:)
Would like to suggest this edit.."aloneness is flew away " as 'loneliness has flew away' .

[Saddam]

Thanks dear..... You are right. Going to edit soon. Thank you so much for this suggestion and attention.

[RubyOmma]

From my third eyes I follow you
Found you in my vision
Under a big arm tree, middle of green grass
Where slow wind pass.

I like it. I would maybe suggest, if I may, don't take it the wrong way...
My aloneness is flew away
And a strange eagerness is on it's way

[Saddam]

You can....... I know I am not so good. Please suggest. thanks for this attention.......

[stars are far]

That was very nice poem. your emotions were very well pertrayed there and the feelings were amazing. well done Saad :)

[Saddam]

Thank you very much dear friend...

[Mila]

Great poem! Enjoyed it very much. One little thing, try and read through this one more time, I did catch a few typos. Well done otherwise! :)

[Saddam]

Thank you very much dear friend...

[MandaBear]

Such a great poem. It has a certain romantic feeling and I like that. One thing when you said "My aloneness is flew away" I am not sure if you meant to leave the "is" there. Other than that It's a great write =) Glad I came across it =)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend.... thanks for that notice. I'll check it out.

[Jeyanthi]

I can quite capture what you are saying, a recall feeling-at morning. Is not it?

Nice poem. :)

[Saddam]

Absolutely. Thank you so much dear...........

[nazia]

Romantic, imaginative well structured.. :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much Nazia.........

[Lyndy]

Beautiful and inspirational poem! I like it. :D

[Saddam]

Thank you very much dear friend Lyndy..

[Rachelle]

A mix of the mystical with the emotional....
I believe there are some missing words but adding them will hardly affect the overall tone of the poem...
Applause-worthy!

[Saddam]

Thank you very much dear friend...