A GIRL IN RAINY DAY

The day was Monday
Time was morning four,
For walk, I took straight way
Sudden, the day become dark-
And cloud began to roar.

A short of time ahead
Strolled cloud start to dropping
Soon as downpour, I took a shed
There, already, was one or two people-
Soon rain get stop, we were hopping.

In this impending rainy-foggy time
Any one was listlessly and want not come out
Far and wide, no one was there on line
Suddenly, a girl appear from somewhere
It insane me, 'cause road was empty now and
right.

I shook my head in hesitate
Girl encourage me,' enjoy the heavy rain'
All of sudden, I decide to follow her state
effectively, by degrees, I change my place
I saw her light foot and long pigtail, golden.

Impressively, she was walking wet
She making me passionate for her
Meantime, at the twirling side of road, that was
net-
Good sun, and she was out of sight
I was purposeless and without respond
Stunned, haggard and soaked without understand.

Reviews

[Vidya Bacchus]

Well she encouraged you to enjoy the rain with her but then disappeared perhaps you will see her again :)

[Saddam]

thank you dear friend. And i'll enjoy the rain next season.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome and do enjoy the rain next time :)

[Shaquana Adams]

Impressively, she was walking wet
She making me passionate for her
Meantime, at the twirling side of road, that was
net

I love the phrasing in this. The simple usage of past and present tense along with the substitution for incorrect English dialogue makes this a most interesting and mysterious read. Love it! :)

[Saddam]

i am smiling with read your review..i feel happiness.. thanks.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A mystery in words that craves to be read well done, good read.

[Saddam]

thank you dear very much.

[Penny]

Hmmm.. very mysterious write. That girl is just like me, though i hv never impressed sum1 like she did :-P. Anyhow, it is a sweet little piece. Well done

[Saddam]

thank you bro....i have too never impress any other but one....which fail.

[Penny]

It happens buddy. But 1 shud never lose hope.

[Saddam]

thank you....