PANTING NIGHT STORY-1

A tribute to Delhi gangrape victim BRAVE GIRL of our District NIRBHYA.

Once i was part of social assembly
There was mind about women race
They talking-" Treat half race very respectfully
They are mother, sister, goddess of grace.

Everyone very gravelly was taking the fact
The man exellently put forword his verse
All person were enchant, who were in
attachment
Respect the womenhood- last word was given by
force.

Naturally, every one was deeply attaiched
At the end, preacher got much praise
Some person was amateur, some anarched
But mob, in return, gave hand raise.

I was proceed my way, surrounded by voice
A horrowing and heart rending sound came
Starled, i look every vacant place
Two foot ahead, i saw enormous shame.

Aside the road, a girl was in panting pain
Her heart rending sobs given me wretch
She was in enormous misery and still it gain
She was screaming and nothing was to wrapped.

She was curled-up with her body
Her eyes was full of pleading
She was trembling fearfully
And for mercy, justice was begging.

Reviews

[MsJewel]

This is quite chilling. You got your point across very well. It's a great poem. My advice is to go back and check a few of the words for spelling. Other than that - dark and emotional. Very well done.

:) Julie

[Saddam]

thank you....may error be....can you please hilighted them....I'll instant correct then....thank you for advice..I am very happy to hear my weak point.

[MsJewel]

I'd be happy to: attached, begging, assembly.
:)

[Saddam]

I edit my poem..thank you

[☾Panda☽]

Difficult to read cause your poem has expensive words, it let me think, well done!

Greetings Panda

[Saddam]

thank you Sir....it is my heart stirring sound.

[☾Panda☽]

I'm not a sir I'm a woman;)

[Saddam]

beg a pardon ma'am

[☾Panda☽]

Hahaa okay, accepted (;

[Penny]

Horiffies me! U hv really worked hard with this poem.

[Saddam]

thank you...yes it take almost two month...but really i feel it was a horrible and big shame for our society...

[Penny]

Ur welcum. And yes, Big shame. But lately i hv started 2 conc. On another perspective of dis case.