YOUR FEELING

Every time, whenever I think about you 

I feel, at bottom, where ocean start 

When I am not feeling you 

Found myself at the middle of dessert. 

Meantime, I am reached top of heaven 

Bosoms spread, when I tell 

Meanwhile when I not mention you 

A fire flames and burnt me like hell. 

It’s your feeling that I treat myself as human being 

Though I was a sculpture without feeling 

It’s your voice, which gave me life 

Though I was unhappy with my living. 

Still I can feel you, smell you 

Although you are out of my eyes 

All day remembering you, untill I sleep 

In your memories, I wake up, when sun rise. 

I am alone without you 

You are in my deep end mind 

I have nothing without your memories 

There will be only dark without your dream.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"I am alone without you
You are in my deep end mind
I have nothing without your memories
There will be only dark without your dream."

Your feelings are explicit and truthful. Your dream is deepening the dark divide which the narrator hopes to bridge the gulf. Bravo, sir...:)...

[Saddam]

Thank you Sir, You are spotting right, which is Great. Thank you again.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..............

[Saddam]

Is this a lovely poetry or not? I am confused little bit. Can you guys help me?