YOUR FEELING

Every time, whenever I think about you 

I feel, at bottom, where ocean start 

When I am not feeling you 

Found myself at the middle of dessert. 

Meantime, I am reached top of heaven 

Bosoms spread, when I tell 

Meanwhile when I not mention you 

A fire flames and burnt me like hell. 

It’s your feeling that I treat myself as human being 

Though I was a sculpture without feeling 

It’s your voice, which gave me life 

Though I was unhappy with my living. 

Still I can feel you, smell you 

Although you are out of my eyes 

All day remembering you, untill I sleep 

In your memories, I wake up, when sun rise. 

I am alone without you 

You are in my deep end mind 

I have nothing without your memories 

There will be only dark without your dream.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"I am alone without you
You are in my deep end mind
I have nothing without your memories
There will be only dark without your dream."

Your feelings are explicit and truthful. Your dream is deepening the dark divide which the narrator hopes to bridge the gulf. Bravo, sir...:)...

[Saddam]

Thank you Sir, You are spotting right, which is Great. Thank you again.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..............

[Sindu]

Great work Ssadd :) It's hard to fight but not impossible and you showed that.

[Kasey Miriam]

Very nicely done. It flows well the detail is very well thought out. There are minor grammar errors but overall a very well done poem

[Jennesis]

i feel the longing in this work. Nice emotional content

[child of God]

good work I love the flow and deep emotion thank you for pending

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

That feelings will always press upon us, lets fight it back into submission, well done, good read.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Nice read, there are few grammatical errors, I think you look at it once more, I like here the feelings and emotions,, it is well written n well flowed

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

This poem sounds really cool. It has a nice flow to it.

Kaze~

[Lexyeff]

Epic line there
"It's your voice, which gave me life
Though I was unhappy with my living"

[Saddam]

Thank you soo much dear. I am glad.

[Lyndy]

Beautiful poem well written! :)

[Saddam]

Thank you very much dear friend..........

[Ishita Dixit]

Nice work SSADD!
Beautiful poem. There are a few grammatical errors though. I'm sure you'll correct them though. :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear....

[Ishita Dixit]

Welcome! :)