ROADSIDE LOVRS

At the road side 

When he sat and see 

Lovely face and body pretty 

His imagination ride. 

Eyes on girl 

Inspecting and connecting with them 

And excitement about their name 

Want to unfurl. 

A beautiful curve 

Someone is good, someone have big pigtail 

Someone"s glass on her nose, how can he tell? 

But right now he love. 

By general or enviously 

Anyone, when looked at him for a moment 

He blither ' it is my attainment" 

Wish to keep entity. 

Right away he reveal 

Marvelous untouchable love and summoned 

His heart, frantically for her, moaned 

And try to heal.  

After a certain hour 

When all road side lovers abut at place 

Make own enormous victorious palace 

And feel overseeing power.

Reviews

[Ana B.]

A nice write, a bit sad, but lovely in its flow and emotions :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear.........

[Neeharika Neehu]

nice keep it up :),one suggestion is look at the words instead of see saw would've been nice,but if it's delibrately done no problem.go on write more :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend.....

[Deepika]

A light hearted poem..fine write! :)

[Saddam]

Thank you very much dear....

[Lyndy]

Oh, this is beautiful! I love it. :D

[MomzillaNC]

I see what you're themes are and applaud the effort here. Very touching and beautiful ideas and imagery that could be compelling.

NOTES: For me, the grammatical and language issues detract from the intent of the poem.

[Shadow of Death]

This is beautiful. Very much so.

[Saddam]

thanks dear for stopping by

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is lovely my friend .Well said :)

[Saddam]

thank you very much dear friend for your lovely comment. thanks.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

a touching read really, courage and bright sentiment shines through.

[Saddam]

thank you very much dear friend for your feedback.

[Shaquana Adams]

This is a lovely read. Thanks for sharing :)

[Saddam]

thank you very much dear poet...your words are such a magic. Love you.

[Penny]

Distinction b/w various types of girls is shown nicely. Beautiful write..

[Saddam]

Lovely to hear that sir....thanks sir

[Penny]

Ur welcum.