DEPARTURE of LOVE

Still! sleep! my love is away! 

What the world are say? 

Calm! mute! dead, my love! 

Where gone, my dove? 

Oh God! what you have done? 

Parted with me, there is none. 

My reign of love is now ruin 

And sobs, distress are placed in vein. 

Now worse is my beauty 

With me who will be naughty. 

For what, my lip, my eyes, is 

By love who will increase? 

Pale, cold, my love is front of me 

Now, what would life be? 

No! I can not live with this nightmare 

I'll rid myself from the world unfair. 

Life's pretty sunrise turn into dark gloom 

I not see the white flower, bloom. 

Alone, miserable, YOU curse to live 

Oh God! death! I through this life.

Reviews

[Penny]

Sorry for the delay. The whole poem, its tone specially makes it look like an arguement with God, a complaint. One can see the painbut what I saw with it was your struggle to blame it on others. I don't know whether whose mistakes have given you this pain, but this struggle if used at the right place would surely not let you give up on life. Take carel.

[Saddam]

thank you dear friend....as you suggestion, someone other tell me too so i'm trying to do new life with new view. thanks.

[Penny]

My pleasure. If you need any help or emotional support, I am just a message away.

[Saddam]

thanks you dear friend. I will.

[Sami Khalil]

A lots of pain and questioning. Marvelous...:).....

[Lyndy]

This is a well written poem! I like it.

[MomzillaNC]

I can see the pain you're trying to convey.

NOTES: The grammatically errors, for me, get in the way of the read.

[Vanesa Markovic]

This work reads like a storm, powerful and full of fury.
Well done!
-VM

[brezybaby3]

Such deep heartfelt emotion. The grief jumps off the page. A lot of grammar errors. Are you reading English writings to see how they are put together?

I hear your cry and feel the pain... and know sometimes if we spend all of ourselfs looking at doors that have closed.. we fail to see the new open ones.. I hope the sun finds you and warms your spirit..

[EmilyBianca]

Very interesting. Seems similar to my writing style

[Kasey Miriam]

Very deep emotional pain expressed here. Very well penned dear friend.

[Utkarsh Singh]

ssadd what to say brother ..your poems are awesome n you are awesome ......:D

[Itumeleng Molokomme]

it's cuts deep. very sad. the emotion in this is very clear. great write