I AM BEATING the LIFE

I am beating the life 

I am repeating the life. 

A moment, which I celebrate many years ago; 

Still celebrating today and will tomorrow; 

A rack moment, at which I cry yesterday 

Still at that I weeped today; 

This is my boring life.

 

There was a love in my past;

She tried to change me,very fast; 

Many protest came on the way 

But, all of sudden, she stopped her way 

..and gave me a confusing life. 

Whenever I think of my first love; 

Tears make me blind, and burn flame in my nerve 

Sudden, decide to spoil myself 

But love, stand erect and help 

Then I comedown to carry my shoulder 

And supposing to build my folder 

This is my gloaming life.

Reviews

[Blue]

"A moment, which I celebrate many years ago;
Still celebrating today and will tomorrow;
A rack moment, at which I cry yesterday
Still at that I weeped today;
This is my boring life."

-My favorite stanza.

I call it "boring moments" but not "life". I hope you can break free from rut and take interest in the beautiful things life offers.

[Saddam]

thank you dear very much....hope so, thanks for your blessing.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Whenever I think of my first love;
Tears make me blind, and burn flame in my nerve
Sudden, decide to spoil myself.

I really like this piece, we never forget our first love.

Kaze~

[anne]

But love, stand erect and help
Then I comedown to carry my shoulder
And supposing to build my folder........
i liked this piece a lot...best solution:energize and move again...:))

[Shaquana Adams]

This is a very capturing and engaging poem. Very nicely penned! :)

[MsJewel]

A beautiful heartfelt poem my sweet friend. Your poetry keeps getting better and better :) Julie

[star73]

Love it great write=) sometimes life does seem boring. Lol

[SAYED THANGAL]

the real love once celebrated, those moments very beautifully illustrated, don't worry, life is a circle, will come new and things, wish you the best

[Saddam]

thank you sir for this compliment....

[Penny]

So different, kind of wierd yet very very interesting. The fact that it has a good rhythm, almost like a ballad doublesit value for me.:-P Very well done.

[Saddam]

thank you very much dear friend...

[Penny]

As usual, its my pleaaure.

[Tina Louise UK]

Heartfelt piece my friend :) x

[Saddam]

thank you dear very much.

[Talia The Hedgehog]

what a lovely read. you are VERY talented. you should carry on things like this

[Saddam]

thank you dear friend....

[Talia The Hedgehog]

you are very kind to your dear poems and you should DEFINETLY make more