Written By A "Kid"

Wrote this after being ripped on for being a "kid". Maturity was far from present in my analyst.

So I'm a child?
Does this mean I am lacking any skill?
Should you demean me and degrade me?

Crushing my drive at your own will?
Am I a lesser being?
Are my actions juvenile?
Is that why you disrespect me?
Is it I who's in denial?

See, I think you've got it backwards,
You're the child in this tale.
You thrive off the pain of others,
You show no pity for the frail.
Respect is something earned,
It is not a given right.
I hope the harsh words of this child,
Will help him sleep tonight.

Author's Note

Doesn't make sense, generally horrible. Thank you very much for reading!

Reviews

[Richard Man]

No, I know exactly where you are coming from on this one. Mutual time for each, a game of table tennis ping-pong. It is no point playing a game if one player has perfected the art of spinning and serving at break neck speed and the other has just learned to play. Winning is not going to impress anyone. Losing will depress, however. The better player should allow himself the joy of learning to play with his left hand so a game is a challenge for both. You have a brain, a soul, a heart you have the right to express your thoughts, your feelings and your emotions but you need still to play the game. Match point!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Great stuff! I really liked this! Right is right no matter the age. And everyone has basic human rights...those need to be respected regardless of age.

[Epipsychologist]

It totally makes sense. I think you could fix up some wording to make it a little smoother, but the point that it is childish to wield seniority like a bully is totally true.

[That_Girl]

Horrible? No, definitely not horrible. Sharp and not overdone. Nice little rant/poem. Whatever you wanna call it... a poetic rant? :D

[DrD]

The only thing wrong with this writing is your opinion of it. It offers a sound and valid theme that deserved to be said and you said it in excellent form and with skill to create a delightful read.

[Sacha Davison]

I am often very critical of my own work. Im always striving to improve! I am glad to hear your thoughts, as usual! Thank you, kindly!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hey Sacha, no this is not bad. The second stanza could do with a little more crafting but it is a good measured poem on a relevant subject.

[Sacha Davison]

Thank you, good sir!

[Jeremia]

I thought it made complete sense. I really like this one.

[David Scott]

Makes perfect sense. Generally fine. You are welcome for the read and review.
Intelect, passion, and clear communication. Art is beautiful. Even the rough finger painting or sloppy coloring of children can make a statement and touch the heart. Art also grows and matures... sometimes for the better and sometimes not. Talent is a gift that even a child can accept, but a child is usually recognized as such and it should not be an insult for a child to be recognized as one. However, many of us who have seen many years have not seen the maturity of our souls...
I am sorry you were hurt and you make a great point here. Still, do not take insult at being a "kid". Take joy and live hope and be thankful your voice is heard and your words are being read. Use your anger to motivate great writing and thank those who give you honest responses, even if you do not agree with or like what they say. Silence is a worse form of disrespect.

[Sacha Davison]

Aha, this is one bad a*s review. Im on my phone so i must make my comment short and sweet, but i assure you i am more than thankful or all of the ears ive been lent from this community
make no mistake, though. It is not the title of Kid that offends me, but hoe the title is expressed. If that makes sense lol, i cant exactly reread this on my device :P

[Sacha Davison]

For* how* stupid samsungs

[KAOlmsted]

It makes perfect sense; the only thing horrible about this piece is that it needed to be written, because the behavior your analyst demonstrated is condemnable. Thank you for sharing this with us and thank you for the friend request...I hope you'll be able to read some of my work; it's not all rated mature, you Kid you *laugh*

-kimmer

[Tasha]

I love this poem. Sometimes it's the children who are smarter than the adults. This isn't horrible at all, it is actually quite wonderful. ;)

[Dr. Wood ?]

it tells how you feel so what more could it do?