Life

Someone asked me to write about life. It's such a vague topic to suggest.

We are all in this together
Each created equal
Still the good sit idle
We all must live with evil
The shadows that the light casts
Leaves the weathered weak and feeble
The young still ponder dreams and
Hopes higher than the tallest steeple
We turn to faith for meaning
Different creeds for different people
With borders to divide us 
These lines exist not to a beetle

We call this life our own
Taking claim to all it's given
But this life is a shared one;
So pray we are forgiven
For when their human masters
Cannot chew what they've bitten
The sympathy of the Animal Kingdom
May soon appear forbidden
Enslaved in our own world
To the beasts we've killed and ridden
To take claim to this world
Requires more than has been written 

Author's Note

Makes little sense, poor syllable count. Flow is meh. Hard topic to be passionate about when it's so broad.

Reviews

[Melody Telleria]

Your talent is such a lighthouse in a sea of darkness. Because you feel youre young, you cannot accept that its possible your words can move hearts and minds, but truly you are brimming with beauty in that mind of yours. I sense your much too early life experiences have grown you up and its one of those times you can say that good came out of something bad. Its almost like some people HAVE to have a certain life to become who they are meant to be. Ironic.

[Sacha Davison]

Might I just say: this must be the most poetic review I've ever received. It is very touching to have you express such a fondness of my inscriptions. I certainly agree with your thoughts on the irony of my situation. If I may be so conceited, it is a blessing to have weathered the storms of my adolescence to evolve into a much wiser, more mature being. Thank you so much, again, for your review! :)

[Melody Telleria]

You're so welcome. I'm already a huge fan. Keep writing, I will keep reading. And you find time, I'd love to know what you think of some of my writings. I feel you have an eye for poetry and fluidity.

[Sacha Davison]

I will certainly take a look at some of your work! If there's anything in particular you would like to have reviewed do not hesitate to send me a read requests. I may not be so hasty to the draw, as I have quite a few of them. However, at times I will jump to the more recent requests to ensure my new-found friends and fans do not feel neglected.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Ah, you have such raw talent I'm envious...and you recognize your need to grow. DON'T EVER stop writing! You are a MASTER in the making! I could point out flaws here but it is not necessary. You just keep writing and I'll keep reading!

[Sacha Davison]

I am honored to have such a great review. Don't hesitate to make corrections on my work, by the way. I always welcome suggestions on revision. I do not plan to stop writing, especially with the support of such kind and experienced writers such as yourself. I cannot express, in words, the pride I feel when I get reviews like this.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I've got a shoebox full of rejection slips from magazines...It takes a tough shell to be a writer and a tougher shell to be a poet.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

But as Robert Frost observed, "Being a poet is a CONDITION. It is NOT an occupation."

[Starfruitanimal]

"To the beasts we've killed and ridden
To take claim to this world
Requires more than has been written " - nicely written, i particularly like this line. use of metaphors is good :)

[Sacha Davison]

Thank you! :)

[Jeremia]

I really like the second stanza. All of it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ok maybe a morbid view Sacha but there is truth in this very well written piece. I guess in life the secret is not to lose hope and to recognise amongst all the greed ang the chaos there are many people in all walks of life who are good and who do good. You for example by sharing your story help others to understand more about the world we live in and that there is hope for those who are lucky enough to be given the chance and who actively decide to take it. If everyone took responsibility to make the few feet around them good the world would be a wonderful place.

[}Echo{]

I really like this. And it makes sense if you get into the flow of it. The flow is really good. Great write. :)

[Sacha Davison]

Thank you, there is always much room for improvement though.

[}Echo{]

:D