Catastrophic

Catastrophic
Mind just lost it
Why drop the ball
When I've already caught it

Each new time
Feeling heavier than before
This time when it falls down
I catch it, but my knees hit the floor

How did I get here
I thought I was stronger than this
Its those days without the weight on my shoulder
That I surely miss

A catalyst
Pushing for a better tomorrow
Is what I need

But so bad at this
I realize I have been
As I get up from my knees

Refusing to give up
When I'm at my weakest
Feeling Beaten and broken down
Strangely helps me see it-

The light at the end of the tunnel
So prosperous it seems
Inching closers with my new faith
Helping me realize my forgotten dreams

So wicked have been the days
That led be to a realization so beautiful
Loving this sensation
That now I will make useful

Never forgetting my astranged past
As i catch the ball this time fast
Throwing it into the air forcefully
As I begin each new task

Taking my weaknesses
And drawing strength for the future
Knowing that with this new mindset
Things will certainly go smoother

So a day so catastrophic-
I thank god now
That my mind almost lost it
With every valuable lesson learned
And the reasons he taught it

I now look at adversity
So much different
Taking the good with the bad
And everything that comes with it

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

The best lessons come from difficulty. Well penned, Shawn.

[shawnt5604]

Thank you rita! Very much

[shawnt5604]

Thank you rita! Very much

[Aethereal]

Catastrophe motivates adaptation, and this necessitates innovation. Innovation makes us much stronger than we ever were before. The next time the Big Bad Wolf knocks at our door, our door is made of steel and our house is made of brick instead of straw.

[shawnt5604]

Great insight! Thanks for the review.

[Michelle Farren]

I am very impressed with the way this was written ! Your poetry writing skills are amazing. This is a very inspirational piece for people who are going through a rough patch in their life (:

[shawnt5604]

Thank you so much. I really sppreciate your feedback ;)

[C. Rose]

I personally enjoyed the concept - especially (I thought I was stronger than this) and (... without the weight on my shoulder ...)

A technical fix: "Its those days" should be "It's those days" (apostrophe) or "It is those days".

I recommend capitalizing God and He and maybe even faith to make it clearer that the positive conclusion is religious - If I interpreted that correctly.
Oh and I wouldn't capitalize Beaten.

Nice to meet you Shawn.

[shawnt5604]

Thanks for your feedback! Please excuse my poor grammar here and there. I write from my cell phone a lot of the timeand tend to post writings before proofreDing much at all.