flip the mirror

still not sleeping
with my eyes wide open
feeling like my time to shine
is slowly closing

 

tired of not being able to smile
remembering what i used to be
tired of looking at the mirror
and seeing me

 

looking back at the days
when i woke up with aspiration
now i struggle to even get up-
disheartening how the times are changing

 

taking a moment to reflect
wondering how i ended up this way
thinking about tomorrow
hoping its not like today

 

my dreams from yesterday
are now the failures i realize
these times that pain me
are the things i feel inside

 

waking up to a day
that i never thought could happen
a better tomorrow
is now hard to fathom

 

staying optimistic
now seems so unrealistic
but as my faith grows
i must stay with it

 

these thoughts that materialize
strangley have me mesmerized
as i stand in front of the mirror today
looking into my own eyes

 

and only then can i see
deep inside my own misery
a man in the mirror
that i'm actually glad to see

 

it would take a fool
to need a million dollars to be happy
i dont even need one
to open my eyes and gladly see

 

that this is a beautiful world
god has given to me
happiness in my heart
is as simple as a smile
from you to me

 

so many
are caught up in what they have
or what they do
but true bliss
is from within
hard to see
but its true

 

and i must admit
i thought the same things too
it took a long time
to appreciate
walking in these shoes

 

but only now i can see
how many true blessings
have been laid in front of me
i'll wake up with a smile
and just be
the me i've always wanted to be...

Reviews

[FlatLineBeauty]

Very thoughtful and deep. Sometimes it helps when we take a step back and just look at the small things in life that are good. Even small things that make us happy. You can be whoever you wish to be just always stay true to yourself. Don't change who you are to suit another person's vision. Only change if you wish to change or if it is for the better. Great write. xo Winter

[shawnt5604]

my thoughts exactly, i'm glad you enjoyed this piece, thanks for taking the time to read :) your reflection of what I expressed in this writing are precisely the reaction I was hoping to receive. :P

[FlatLineBeauty]

Awh, well you are most welcome. Hope you don't mind, but I requested it to a few of my other friends to read. :) I think they would enjoy it as well.

[shawnt5604]

I don't mind at all, glad you did :)

[Darkstole]

Shawn,

I think that is what you call, a perfect dish. Similar is the concept with the poetry.

When there is the right amount of the content, with perfect flow and story line it is very delicious to have it with you.

There is a very thin line which we have to maintain from over stuffing the poetry and making it with a right amount.

I loved the emotion packed in it.

Great write.

Keep this work on.

Thanks for sharing

Dark stole

[shawnt5604]

your words are greatly appreciated, I enjoyed your insight, thanks!

[Darkstole]

You are welcome.

Regards

[Jack Buckner]

A very entertaining piece Shawn! THanks for sharing it!

[shawnt5604]

and thank you for the feedback! :)

[shawnt5604]

and thank you for the feedback! :)

[MichaelsLyric.com]

This captures the human experience, so well. Despite all of the limitations, it is amazing to have this life. Nice job. Thank you for posting this one.

[shawnt5604]

thank you much!

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

All i can say is that you are a writer my friend! Welcome, we will take care of you!

[shawnt5604]

thank you very much! I just started this site, my first time writing online, and the feedback I've received today has me floored, i'm loving this, thanks again :)

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Add me, ill be interested in reading more of your work!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Sometimes this is true.We look into the mirror and it is a stranger looking back at us .Time and situations change us .This is a very nice poem:P

[shawnt5604]

thanks for your thoughts, its much appreciated :) I like your take on it, sometimes whether because of things that are in your control or not, the world around you and your experiences with it can change you, and its fascinating (sometimes depressing lol) how the times can change a person...

[Vidya Bacchus]

That is true change is the only constant we just have to grow with it.You are welcome:)

[Erin Michelle]

I'm so glad you have decided to share your poetry. Constructive criticism is what writers need, and it's good to get your work out there. No one wants to end up like Emily Dickenson where her poetry wasn't discovered until after she died. . . However, that might not be such a bad thing. . . Thanks for sharing this piece that is truly human. I love it.

[shawnt5604]

awhh thank you, it's much appreciated, and inspiring ;)

[Lyn Anderson]

What a beautiful flowing verse with a subtle yet effective rhyming scheme.

[shawnt5604]

thank you much for the feedback :)