Proverb Poem of Abandonment

Abandonment is a scourge of anti love upon the earth.

Abandonment in this world is at an all time high.
It brings so much sorrow, in pain God must sigh.

From lovers to leaders
From parents to teachers.
 
Hurting children and nations
Hurting heaven and all good relations.

Abandonment is the cowards game.
One who is in a state of shame.

Like a firemen who leaves when he could have saved.
A surgeon prematurely walks away with heart in hand bereaved.

Oh what wrath will their future hold.
They stand warned, retribution told.

And, yes by fools all is abandon.
In wrath not gold will they be overladen.


Some have learned a love that's forever.
Others are stupid though they think they're clever.

Love and wisdom cry out for commitment.
But the heart of the fool has no sentiment.

There is a way that seems so self secure
But it is a way that ends in torture.

 

That we would forever embrace the child, the charge, the lover.

May our vision be expanding with a heart thats ever larger.

Oh that we would all see Loves wise plan.
That we would walk holding Loves eternal hand.

Reviews

[Mr. Lopez]

this poem seemed a little edgey for your style. Please don't get me wrong.... I loved it! There is so much that i agree with in what your poem says. So many spend huge resources og energy on being dishonest when, If they put the same amount of energy into spreading love , this world would be a batter place . Thank you for the write. GREAT!!

Mr. Lopez

[Arthur Henn]

I would have to give this the poem of the year! I really liked what I read and the message behind it is superb!. Well written my friend.

Art

[Mistral Bilgera]

i agree. every lines scream of the truth. a great writing filled with wisdom. :)
thanks for sharing, and keep on inspiring!

[Dani California]

To walk in love is the key to everything,
but we are foolish and prideful
and we walk away from it rather than toward it...
from what is right... what is truth...
and for that we will have to pay the piper.

This is a great write Rhea,
addressing our foolishness.. our pride...
our ignorance.

Excellent as always my friend. Thank you.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Abandonment, in law, is the relinquishment or renunciation of an interest, claim, privilege, possession or right, especially with the intent of never again resuming or reasserting it.

The contents of your composition clearly captures this theme. It also reflect our human nature to never give up on hope and faith; for it is also said:

'Love, will find a way'! Great write.

God's Blessing
Phill(ozofee)

[Kal]

it is a nice poem that holds what the world is going through...
i liked this part (Like a firemen who leaves when he could have saved.
A surgeon prematurely walks away with heart in hand bereaved.)
well done man, i mean we really should start working on this tragedy that we're facing cause it really breaks everything upside down, i mean lot of ppl think of this tragedy as a solution and dont realize that it is actually not solving anything at all...
well done!

[Helen Woodward]

Interesting Raye, doing this in proverbs, it made for interesting reading and of course you gave it your own touch. I would ditch the surgeon line, it is too long and I can't imagine a surgeon walking away with someone's heart in his hand...even though it is poetic it just doesn't ring true...up to you though.
Quite a feat here...
Helen :-)

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

"A surgeon prematurely walks away with heart in hand bereaved."

That is a sharp sentence there. Very great metaphor, I loved that one the most.

You are right. Abandonment is a huge problem in this world, and I feel if we all held hands and loved one another, that we would all be happier and more healthy individuals. Even in the church congregations, when others ignore their church members, or reject them because they dont' "fit in," we are pushing that person away from God. I have never been the type of person who abandoned anyone because they were different, I don't abandon anyone. Bec I know what it feels like to be abandoned. My father was never there, and my last relationship abandoned me emotionally.

"Oh that we would all see Loves wise plan.
That we would walk holding Loves eternal hand..."

This is a great close to a great poem with a big message, that leaves us deep in thought.

your cafe friend...kena

[emmajoy]

Such sensitive thoughts and words, you've created a picture here and brought me to tears.

'A surgeon prematurely walks away with heart in hand bereaved' - this is such a clever use of words

'Love and wisdom cry out for commitment.
But the heart of the fool has no sentiment.' - so true.

Thank you for sharing.