A day in Baltimore

Some things Baltimore teaches me a little deeper every time I go.

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I went to Baltimore again.

To sharpen my perspective, come up with a wiser plan.

Saw so many different faces.

So many different races.

Everyone for the most part seems to get along.

They tend to say things that encourages someone and helps them be  strong.

Most want to make this rainy day a good day despite the weather.

But there are some so weak, so hurt their just hanging by a tether.

It makes me sad to see them this way;

to see some that struggle just to get through the day.

But most the people I see encourage me.

Life is better because where all free.

It is a wonderful city, a wonderful country for you and me.

It is not all cake and goodies by any means.

I see many who struggle to get by.

Some who carry on there faces a sigh.

Many who have had great pain.

But to day where all up and about

Working ,walking, talking our discouragement  out.

It is a new day in Baltimore another day of hope.

Another day of receiving and giving stuff that helps us all cope.

There is something they understand in Baltimore

There is a rough but uniting cord.

It is not just Edgar Allen Poe and his lore.

Where all in this together in this city of Chesapeake shore.

 

 

 

Reviews

[JohnL]

Hello Rhea,
Thanks for your comment on my little poem. I am happy when I am able to share a joke - seemingly with your son also. Actually, I wrote that on a tiny hand held computer while sitting in my car waiting for my wife who was in with the chiropodist. Now the joke has become corny!
I have read all the work you have entered here but will not enter a critique at this stage as I note that you request "No CSS". I don't know what this means and do not wish to cause any offense. Perhaps you would be kind enough to let me know?
I will, however make a few comments. Your work is well observed in its physical commentary, but what is noticable is its perception of underlying emotion and feeling. It is fresh from the pen (or more likely, the keyboard) and in some ways, would suffer if it was too closely edited as it reveals much of the person behind it - something that might be lost under an excess of 'refinement' I hope these remarks don't constitute 'CSS'.
A very enjoyable read,
John

[A.r. Bazian]

very touching!
very personal emotions!!
you've been through so much pain!
suffering made you the man you r...

be well

i liked this piece very much!
keep it up!

[chris' girlfriend]

i love Baltimore and this poem :)

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NIce, I really liked it. Love the insight you give on your point of view. Really thought it was funny when considering it's not all, "cakes and goodies." Gets me hungry, lol. ^_^