The never ending cry

Within the heart of everyone is a cry that never ends

There is a cry within every heart

one which will not abate.

 

This cry which most avoid by busyness.

Yet within there is distress.

 

This cry from of old

when the first of men their stories told.

 

This cry that will not die.

And children not yet born will carry this sigh.

 

It is one that lovers have had shake their soul,

when death did come and take its toll.

 

You ask what the cry could be

this cry of you this cry of me.

 

It is the cry that burns infernal

A cry for a relationship that is eternal.

Reviews

[JohnL]

Hello Rhea, I've finally sorted this 'friends' thing and am finding it very useful.

This poem deals with a subject which everyone experiences in some measure. Even those who feel they have everything must at times wonder what comes at the end of it all, where am I going? What is the point? What can I aim for? Is all pleasure NOW? Strangled it may be, but in the heart of every man is yearning, a cry for something beyond the immediate. More spiritual than gold and gem, more love than power, fixed not in time but in eternity. Thank you for expressing this.
Now a brief look at the writing. I would not want you to write in anything other than your own style but it would be a good excercise to write the same poem in blank verse. Written in couplets as this is, it is very difficult to avoid a contrived look to the rhyme. Blank or free verse would free up lots of vocabulary which may express better that which you want to say and give you the oportunity to experiment with line shape in a way that I am sure you'll find interesting - not perhaps for this poem but for future reference.
John

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is beautiful..So sad and heart wrenching indeed :'(
Beautifully written!

Keep writing :)

[Carl Fraser]

You are right on Rhea, there is a void in every human heart, something we all inherited from Adam and eve when they lost the right to be continually in the presence of our almighty creator. And since that time man has tried to fill that void with every tainted and false thing and refusing the saving grace of Jesus who died to restore that first spiritual connection. Some have found it and others are still filling the void with things that never satisfy the soul. Thanks for sparking my thoughts Rhea, great write.............Carl

[emmajoy]

Seems you have a real way with words, find the right phrases from deep inside you...

Maybe a few spelling mistakes but that's immaterial cos of the flow of your work.

[April Child]

Nice poem. I just noticed 1 spelling mistake in the line...

And children not yet born will carrie this sigh.

I think that should be 'carry' Other than that it's a nice piece that strikes a chord, it does seem we are all searching for something or someone. Well put.

[Cats Eye]

Great write, great use of strong words, I love the emotion that spills out from this poem, I enjoyed reading this

[chris' girlfriend]

its perfect!!!
i love your poems

[pal]

so true..
cry for connection between souls. always wanting. even after connecting.. the seeking never ends don't know why..
nice poem
pal