PLEASE

PLEASE

Peace is felt

Lovely it is

Enchanting it can be

A power flows

Soar with the dragons

Embarking on adventures

 

Allen Hollandsworth

�"12/2/11

Author's Note

Did for school time Miss Aurora's class

Reviews

[Jacques]

I'm always getting quite conflicted when reading your poems and anyone can say you're nasty to me or whatever but i'm here to read and give my opinions to help improve writers that's what WC is for right ?

Like Ami N said i don't know where the title PLEASE fitted into the poem , i'm beginning to find your poems quite repitive and there bringing nothing new , nothing excited to read about . It seems to me you use the same words for every poem like Soar , delight and enchanting and i don't know whether you're using these simple words for a certain age group or because u don't know bigger words but i think it's simple enough for you to stop using these same words as it becomes a bore .

I've found a common thing in you're writing is to put dragons in your poems for no particular reason and sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn't , most of the time it doesn't . You have amazing poem titles and i think you need to work on you're poems more because sometimes i read your poems and the title of the poem has no revelance to the write so it gives it no meaning to be there . My advice would be to find some new words and add more to your Vocab , lenghten your poems , stop using dragons when there's no need and make the title of you're poem connect with the write itself .

[Ami N.]

:) Nice write. However, I don't quite understand how the title has to do with the poem?
Besides that, great short poem :)

[Tina Kline]

Really nice. I love the fantasy in this, I love dragons.