FUNNY SUN

FUNNY SUN

Funny sun

How you make me laugh

A joy you bring

Oh such a smile you bring

Funny you are

In the heavens you shine

Smiling on all

Allen Hollandsworth

�"10/14/11

Author's Note

did for bedtime STORIES sun

Reviews

[Jacques]

right . my opinion on this is higher than what i've come to expect of you . it's different but twisted on it's head , it's very good . i've had a few problems with your poems in the past being hollow , like if you could knock on them , they would fall apart because there's nothing to them or nothing working for it . but i've had a change of mind as i feel like you've progressed and you've managed to climb over the mountain and reigned in victory . like this feels to me , your progression feels like a song which is mediorce [ a mediorce song i mean not a mediorce poem DON'T BE OFFENDED ] but in the end , you like it because the end notes are belting out so powerfully . i'm really proud of this poem on your behalf , i wasn't surprised because i knew you're capable of great poems . so well done .

[Violeta]

This one kind of rings out a bit more than your other poems, I completely agree with Jacques. It's quite... well, sunny. I enjoyed it, and you're improving as you go. :)

[Harlie Queen]

amazing :)

[~Blue Fantasy~]

Beautiful! You did a wonderful job on this poem.

[KAREN]

Nice! The sun always makes a day brighter!

[Shane Blackheart]

The sun does have a way of making one happier. This is a cute little poem.

[LadyKarissa]

great little poem. I have not been online too much. I am having some financial
difficulties. Lucie

[Raven Starhawk]

I like the calm and happy essence of this. It is a spirit of something charming.

[Sultry Sundance]

This was very inspiring, happy and uplifing. I couldn't help but to smile when reading it! Thank you for that moment of joyfulness!