SHOPPING FOR JEWLERY

As I walk the mall
Looking around 
I spied as I walked 
An expensive jewelry store

I spied a semi precious stone 
And diamond necklace
It is beautiful
And I grabbed
The beauty

Showed my mom
And said I found 
A beauty
I want this mom







Allen Hollandsworth
�"4/20/11

Reviews

[Jacques]

this is good well alittle better than the previous poems i've reviewed but i don't think the grey colouring helps the point of the poem anymore than it does without it as it's just distracting and if your thinking of a mall with jewelry . grey isn't the first colour which would come to mind also your title says Jewlery but in the poem line four of the first set - you say Jewelry the correct spelling of it - Error Mistake