This poem was RIGHT up my alley of interest... I have def' written that first part in various forms, a great many number of times... Tis one of my favorite soundscapes to play with, and you took it in an absolutely unique and clever direction... Quit it, split-it, transmit slits and fix-its... Seriously, I loved this... Expressively penned... Insatiably brimming with awesomeness...! Kudo's
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
I'm glad you enjoyed it, Silente. I also appreciate your review very much, along with your words. I .. read moreI'm glad you enjoyed it, Silente. I also appreciate your review very much, along with your words. I will definitely keep them in mind, and I will certainly return the favor, a few times.
7 Years Ago
As I said, is my pleasure, and do not worry about reviews, your sincere appreciation of my time is m.. read moreAs I said, is my pleasure, and do not worry about reviews, your sincere appreciation of my time is more than enough for me...!
This poem is deep and amazing. I spent a few years helping someone I know with their depression and I nearly fell in myself.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
I've had my dark moments, and I empathize with anyone who goes through the same. Thank you for your .. read moreI've had my dark moments, and I empathize with anyone who goes through the same. Thank you for your review.
"To elope, maybe get a little dope."
This line made me laugh :P I loved the flow in this piece.
Well penned.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you, love. I'm glad you enjoyed the writing. I'll be sure to check yours out as well, given th.. read moreThank you, love. I'm glad you enjoyed the writing. I'll be sure to check yours out as well, given the chance later today.
I did enjoy, you're welcome. Nah, don't feel obliged for that. I actually don't like the returning f.. read moreI did enjoy, you're welcome. Nah, don't feel obliged for that. I actually don't like the returning favour thing here lol :P
7 Years Ago
It isn't a worry at all. I enjoy reading the writing of those willing to take time to enjoy my own. .. read moreIt isn't a worry at all. I enjoy reading the writing of those willing to take time to enjoy my own. I'm sure it'll be worth the effort of the reads.
I took this to be a "Spoken Word" piece...
a fair start - good tone and rhythmic building - the words require clear diction and attention to syllabic flow.
I would drop the second "But" and lean toward another word - perhaps a stronger one? From there onward the word flow feels less certain and more strained - at least to me. You had my attention with your "beginning" but you have to work at it to keep it to the end.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you for your review. I'll take some of what was said into consideration.
This poem was RIGHT up my alley of interest... I have def' written that first part in various forms, a great many number of times... Tis one of my favorite soundscapes to play with, and you took it in an absolutely unique and clever direction... Quit it, split-it, transmit slits and fix-its... Seriously, I loved this... Expressively penned... Insatiably brimming with awesomeness...! Kudo's
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
I'm glad you enjoyed it, Silente. I also appreciate your review very much, along with your words. I .. read moreI'm glad you enjoyed it, Silente. I also appreciate your review very much, along with your words. I will definitely keep them in mind, and I will certainly return the favor, a few times.
7 Years Ago
As I said, is my pleasure, and do not worry about reviews, your sincere appreciation of my time is m.. read moreAs I said, is my pleasure, and do not worry about reviews, your sincere appreciation of my time is more than enough for me...!
They say writing is just writing, that it's not a real job. If someone asked me what I do, I'd tell them I write, rather than disclose my full-time job as a rep on the phone. I don't consider writing .. more..