Coffe and You

While this was initially made for one of my school's publications following the prompt of "the smell of coffee in the morning," I also wrote this in hopes that that special someone would like me back.

Coffee and You

By Trey Jakosalem

 

They say that the smell of coffee wakes you in the morning,

That the very whiff of it gives you energy.

Or perhaps… that's just me?

Well, regardless of which, good morning.

 

"Sleep well?" I hope to hear you ask, some day.

"Sleep well?" A near-daily greeting to you, I say.

 

Yet, thus far, it is only me.

But perhaps… in the future? Well… we shall see.

 

And I hope you read this, because I wish thee to know,

That the scent of coffee in the morning…

Means so much more than a mere waking.

For it reminds me of you, a woman who I know can bring me sorrow.

 

Yet, I drink it so as I love you so.

You drink it bitter, as if your heart dares to wither.

I like mine bitter-sweet, fitting for loving you when we've yet to meet.

 

But most of all, I love the scent.

As even without tasting it, I can imagine you around me.

HA! And, well, you might view me as crazy,

But at least this way, I can look forward to a day well spent,

 

This is why I like coffee,

It reminds me of you.

I hope one day, you'll drink with me,

And say you love me too.

 

But until then, I drink to sooth my soul,

Hoping that maybe you'll fill its hole.

And of course, I greet thee, "Good morning."

"Sleep well?" I message, and now, I drink here, waiting.

Author's Note

Feel free to give your thoughts. If there are any questions, ask away since I like answering them. Also, is the genre that I chose the correct one?

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Sometimes we can love so hard that we even love someone who is gone, or someone who does not reciprocate....and we don't seem to care about that because our feelings are so strong.
We feel we need them in our lives or we are nothing....that coffee does not taste so good when we are drinking it alone.
I like the conversation added to this piece...reminds me of Robert Creeley...

j.

[Trey Jakosalem]

Good Sir J, thank you for your kind words.
However, I fear that in my case, I was merely being used by her. Still, I published this hoping it may connect with others.
Lastly, while I thank you for the compliment on reminding you of Robert Creeley, I must especially thank you for your insight on drinking coffee alone. I never noticed it until now, and I am very much inclined to agree.

All the best to you, Sir J.

[Ken e Bujold]

Well done Trey. Form, is whatever the Poet (you) wishes it to be. I loved the line "Sleep well? I hope to hear you ask, some day. Such a full line. Invites the reader to interpret in any number of ways how they wish to proceed with the poem.
I am a firm believer that poetry needs to keep its looseness whenever possible. Poets can suggest, even to a degree try to cajole the reader with their lines, but should always learn them room to wander off a bit
That line did it for me, made the rest of the poem an full meal
ken e

[Trey Jakosalem]

Thank you! I agree! Many poems and poets like making things specific (especially when they are inside publications of any kind), and I feel that their creative spirits become restricted. My former school's publication made me feel that way, so maybe that's a personal bias. But, as you said, "poetry needs to keep its looseness whenever possible."

The key, of course (and in my humble opinion), is balance. I feel like I managed to get that if your words of both compliment and criticism are anything to go by!

Thank you very much for your review!

[Ken e Bujold]

balance is indeed one of the essential secrets. In language, tone, and voice. Young (and a lot of old too) misuse all 3. Language: chose your words, not any damn one will do: tone, it's important, if a poem is whimsical don't toss in a warring rhyme, etc: and finally voice, not every poem needs to be confessional, if the reader can't substitute their own I for your I, they won't read you for long

Good luck with your continued scribbling
Ken e

[Kerra]

Sometimes love can be cruel and hard, sometimes it is a blessing. Nicely expressed

[Trey Jakosalem]

Thank you, and I wholeheartedly agree.

[busostupido]

I am in love with all the words you just framed into a simple yet beautiful poetry.

[Trey Jakosalem]

Thank you for your kind words. I try to keep things simple so that I can tell a seemingly direct story. 😊

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Loved this
It’s very nicely written
And I can’t wait till morning to have my first cup
Well done 👍

[Trey Jakosalem]

Thank you, and I hope you enjoy your coffee, Julie. All the best to you!