Reflection

reflecting on rain

blacktop moonlit holograms

dancing in puddles

Author's Note

All constructive feedback welcome! It's a haiku for those who take note of those things.

For such a tiny piece this one had an interesting genesis. It came out of a process with Lost Soul, with a final word choice made with Inject Positivity. Thank you.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

There might be a million poems that try to describe rain & moonlight, but in this very short one, you've expressed something very original without any clichés . . . quite an accomplishment! I like the way every word is chosen to convey maximum meaning. That's what these short forms are all about (((HUGS)))

[Shannon]

Thank you so much barleygirl. I love wrangling words, sometimes!

[Emomoemi Johnson Newcourt]

Mm. It's such a rarity for a poem describing rain - 3 lines - and yet accurately done. That's talent! Well done.

[Shannon]

Thank you for the read and review. I appreciate you stopping by

[Im His Daughter]

Your submission is now read in the http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Nature%2C-Auroras%2C-Lights%2C-Trees%2C-Water%2C-Outdoors-Contest/54059/ please stay tuned for the winning poems. Thank you for your entry. I loved the poem!

[Im His Daughter]

Interesting and a great write. Never thought of rain as moonlit holograms before... good job.

[Relic]

A perfect way to describe the image. Impressive.

:)

[Shannon]

Thank you for stopping by to have a look. The image can after the write. Glad they work together.

[wordman]

i can see the image now,creative thoughts

[Shannon]

Thank you. I like playing with words.

[Dave]

You so beautifully make it easy to see the picture you portray in so few words.

[Shannon]

Thank you Dave, they were a carefully choosen 9 words!

[Dave]

I wish I could say the same. I tend to be more verbose. Now I realize of course that the Haiku is proscribed by the 5-7-5 format. I guess I should try my hand, or mind on it.

[Shannon]

I do tend to treat poems like mental excersize and strip them down to minimum words. Stories.... Well verbose more than applies

[Hi]

I think this serves form well. I very much like inferring something on the surface, but thinking there can be something deeper too.

[Shannon]

This one seems to say many different things to people, especially depending what line holds the most appeal.

Thank you for the review.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

S.Mi,
"Reflections" is nice. Iv'e not tried one of these short elegant poems. I should. There is so much to write about. This is a true picture! Moonlit holograms, creative words. Blessings in all you do. Kathy

[Shannon]

Thank you for your kind words, Kathy. I think I tend to pick different words than many people.

[Wondering Mind]

Refreshing to 'see' a well written Haiku

[Shannon]

Thank you. I am curious as to why 'see'?

[Wondering Mind]

The minds eye cannot help but see when reading excellently crafted imagery

[Shannon]

Okay, you must have a quick look at my very first piece on the Café. Don't feel obligated to review if you don't want. But please look ☺️. It's called Difference:Aphantasia

[ChasingTheDark]

I really like this one, its short and simple, but despite that it is still able to get a lot across and even create a detailed scene! :D

[Shannon]

Thank you. I sometimes love trying to choose just a few words.

[Neal S]

Lovely..You took nine small words and made them beautiful. I like this very much!

[Shannon]

Thank you Neal. I enjoy carving my poems down to the bare minimum words.