The Cellar

The Cellar

A Story by Shannon
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Childhood Magic

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"Can we open it today, Grandma?” I ask, even though I’m sure she will say what she always says: “No, not today”. I’m not too disappointed, because I know she is going to tell me another tale.


“Leprechauns don’t like to be surprised,” Grandma whispers, peering over the edge of her glasses at me, with a glint in her eye, while she’s busy mending Grandpa’s shirt.


Granndmmmaa….how would leprechauns get in the cellar? The door is locked.”


She smiles at me, “They are magic and I said they can let themselves in, whenever they want.”


“Why would they want to use your cellar?” I ask.


“Well,” says my grandma, “sometimes they need a safe place to store their gold in between rainbows. So we have a deal. They can use my cellar; I will make sure no one disturbs them or their gold. In return, they give us extra rainbows.”


“Grandma,” I giggle, “Leprechauns don’t make the rainbow, they just put their gold on the end of it. Everyone knows that!”


Grandma again looks over her glasses, this time with a small frown, “How do you know that? Have you ever asked them? Because I have, and they told me: the rainbow appears after the pot of gold. It seems to me they are the ones who would know these things!”


I look at the heavy door, tucked into the corner of the kitchen. It looks like it’s made of wide pieces of wood. It’s narrower than the other doors in the house and has one of those keyholes that you can see through, right to the other side. But when I tried to use a flashlight to look once, Grandma warned me I would scare away the sugar plum fairies, so I haven't tried since.


Grandma has one of those old looking keys to open the door on a rusty key ring, along with a smaller key.


*


Today, I am helping Grandma kneed the bread dough.  Since I am 8 years old now, I can cut off bits to make buns now too!


Grandma tells me, “A special messenger brought me an antique bicycle all the way from Ireland."


“Why do you need a bike from Ireland?” I ask.


“When I was a young woman, and came to Canada, my sister and I lost each other… .”


“How can you lose a sister?”


“My sister went to another country and I didn’t know where.”


“That must have been sad.”


“It was, but we found each other again, remember Aunt Alice?”


I remember Aunt Alice visiting; she talked verrry funny. Grandma tells me the story of Aunt Alice learning to ride a bicycle when they were about my age. I notice her eyes are all shiny, like she might cry, but she is smiling too, so it’s okay.


Grandma says a gargoyle brought a bicycle to her from her sister. But gargoyles turn to stone when the light hits them, and this makes them grumpy, so we can’t open the door today.


*


In the end, all the stories lead to the same conclusion every time: we can’t open the cellar door today, because some magical creature has taken refuge and must not be disturbed.


As I get older, the stories change a bit. The creatures, like the gargoyle, bring odds and ends that Grandma wants more often. A photograph, a pin, the old bicycle. I play along; the cellar must not be usable for some reason, so my grandmother started making up stories. She seems to love telling me them. It becomes a game, of sorts, with me humoring her, as she used to entertain me when I was small.


*


I’m back home from University, for her funeral. Laughter and tears mix, as we all tell stories about our beloved, and sometimes silly, matriarch.


“So, what’s really up with the cellar?” I think to ask.


“What cellar?” my uncle asks.


“Behind the narrow, heavy door in the kitchen that’s always locked.”


“There’s no cellar there.”


“Yes there is. Grandma always told me about it.”


My uncle, realizing which door I mean, gives me my grandmother’s keys, rusty key ring and all. I pause for a moment, realizing I’ve never seen anyone but her in possession of these keys.


I slide the skeleton key into the old brass key hole and slowly turn. The door opens silently and I peer inside to see a tiny broom closet. My eyes well up; there is no cellar.


My uncle puts his hand on my shoulder, shaking his head.


"I thought you knew; Mom just kept her old junk and cleaning supplies in here. She made up the stories because you threw such a tantrum the first time she told you that you weren’t allowed in.”


Losing the champion of my childhood wonder hits me all at once. Clutching the keys to my chest I start to sob.


“What’s the small one for?” I ask, holding out the keys on the ring.


“I don’t know.”


I search the closet with still burning eyes and locate a very small steamer trunk in the far corner. Getting to my knees, I insert the key, which, unlike the closet door, is a little sticky. After a few seconds, the lock clicks and I open the chest.

An envelope, with my name written in a pretty, but simple, script, has been set on the top. Under  are a scattering of seemingly random vintage, antique or just plain old, objects.


Riffling gently through the chest, my eyes are drawn to a deck of handmade playing cards. Each card is painted with a colorful mythical creature. They are all here: leprechauns, gargoyles, sugar plum fairies, unicorns, ogres… all of them. I take note of a charm bracelet with a bicycle charm still attached and a yellowing photograph of a young family standing in front of a wood farm house, amongst all the other treasures Grandma had spun her tales around.

In the letter, my grandmother asks me to care for our history. There, written in her hand, is the history of my family, as told by the objects she carefully collected over a lifetime.

© 2017 Shannon


Author's Note

Shannon
I have made a few adjustments. If its your second read, let me know what you think.

Things have been going well, so why not add another challenge to the mix - dialogue! Any feedback or suggestions welcome.

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I had a smile on my face every time I read the character of Grandma speaking to you (the narrating character) in this story. This is one of the best short stories I have read, from a sentimental, clever, and intriguing standpoint. I also feel somewhat deprived for not reading it sooner.

I strongly wanted to know what was in the cellar, and I wanted to believe your Grandma was somehow telling the truth as silly as that may sound. Once I realized there wasn't a cellar, I still wanted to believe that somehow her words could be proven true, again, as silly as that may sound. Once the narrator (your character) found that small trunk/chest, I KNEW that she had been telling the truth in some shape or form and I was so happy to read the ending. I found this story to be very enjoyable, well-written, heartwarming, and cleverly executed. I don't know what you had changed from first version, and I am not sure if you're considering changing it again in the future... However, I think the ending is perfect, and it's everything that I wanted even though I wasn't sure what to expect. You captured my interest from start to finish while feeling many emotions throughout this story. There's so much I'd like to quote, but everything past "Riffling gently through the chest" is what blew me way. Even though I was anticipating something, I still wasn't sure what to expect or how it could be executed. The beginning and end are my favorite parts, but I thoroughly enjoyed the story throughout. Remarkably written and expressed, this is my favorite story.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Shannon

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reading and sharing your reaction. It is extremely validating to have someone.. read more
Lost, n'MT

8 Years Ago

You're very welcome. I am extremely glad to hear all of that.



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I like the story. The descriptons give the reader a picture while holding the story line. Well spelt too

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Posted 7 Years Ago


Shannon

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the read and review. I am glad that it created a picture for you. I might suggest yo.. read more
It's a wonderful and heartwarming story. I never knew any of my grandmothers, but oh how amazing it would have been to have one like this. Most any child would be thrilled by such fanciful talk of mysterious creatures hiding here and there and their secretive ways. I used to make up stories for my youngest one, and oh how fun it was! I'll bet this Grandma enjoyed it, too.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


Shannon

8 Years Ago

Thank you Samuel. I enjoy when people relate to my writing in a way that is unique to them. It's a.. read more
I had a smile on my face every time I read the character of Grandma speaking to you (the narrating character) in this story. This is one of the best short stories I have read, from a sentimental, clever, and intriguing standpoint. I also feel somewhat deprived for not reading it sooner.

I strongly wanted to know what was in the cellar, and I wanted to believe your Grandma was somehow telling the truth as silly as that may sound. Once I realized there wasn't a cellar, I still wanted to believe that somehow her words could be proven true, again, as silly as that may sound. Once the narrator (your character) found that small trunk/chest, I KNEW that she had been telling the truth in some shape or form and I was so happy to read the ending. I found this story to be very enjoyable, well-written, heartwarming, and cleverly executed. I don't know what you had changed from first version, and I am not sure if you're considering changing it again in the future... However, I think the ending is perfect, and it's everything that I wanted even though I wasn't sure what to expect. You captured my interest from start to finish while feeling many emotions throughout this story. There's so much I'd like to quote, but everything past "Riffling gently through the chest" is what blew me way. Even though I was anticipating something, I still wasn't sure what to expect or how it could be executed. The beginning and end are my favorite parts, but I thoroughly enjoyed the story throughout. Remarkably written and expressed, this is my favorite story.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Shannon

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reading and sharing your reaction. It is extremely validating to have someone.. read more
Lost, n'MT

8 Years Ago

You're very welcome. I am extremely glad to hear all of that.
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Beautiful story. The exchanges between the grandmother and narrator felt realistic. Some of the sentences felt a little long or wordy. And reading this story is hard on the eyes because the paragraphs aren't indented (this obviously doesn't take anything away from the story; it would just make the reading experience more pleasant).

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Posted 8 Years Ago


Shannon

8 Years Ago

Thanks Clifford. I am struggling to format on here these days, but it should be pretty simple to i.. read more
A family's history is such a precious thing. I have often wanted to document everything about my family so that my children and grandchildren can know and understand where they came from. The good, the bad and the ugly.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


Shannon

8 Years Ago

Thanks for the read Papaya. I enjoy learning family history too. The thing about the sisters losing.. read more
The title drew me in, much the sane as "grandma's stories" I so loved the steady, gentle pace throughout and the story, first through a Childs eyes and then as an adult I thought it was very moving and sentimental. I really loved it. :)

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Posted 8 Years Ago


Shannon

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the read and review, Tina. I am glad you liked it.
Tina H.W.

8 Years Ago

Not at all. Thank you!
Let me first flatter you about the ending.

To me,
The easy ending, The obvious ending, the 'expected' ending would be him finding some sort of financial reward in that closet. Something substential. Like how the grandma had collected money for him over the years, or coins, like lepreachuns in order to give to him.

But you opted for something far more valuable then money.
Stories. The deck of cards was an amazingly fitting gift to reward him with.

This story isn't perfect when it comes to pacing and such,
But honestly, I can't find a substential flaw within it. Maybe If I pick and pluck into it I would, but I feel that if nothing 'Popped' up in my first read there is no need to force the issue and ruin the afterglow of a good tale.

You've done a great job with this, keep up the good work.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


Shannon

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the very thoughtful review. I hadvmade some changes to this one prior to this review,.. read more
This is a beautifully told story that has equal power to the widely-known story of whether there's a Santa Claus or not. This is such an amazing display of your imagination & storytelling abilities! I also love the underlying lesson of how we must all continue the stories of our families, if we get the blessed chance to know them. Many never do. That's why sharing this story here is a gift . . . I'm not even sure if it's a gift of your imagination or a real-life story from your family! And to answer your author's note, your dialogue is well done & realistic sounding. I never hit any bumps while reading.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


barleygirl

8 Years Ago

It's weird, dialogue is the thing that most new writers feel daunted by & stay away from. But once y.. read more
Shannon

8 Years Ago

I love to read dialogue. For me it is the story many times.. Thanks for the encouragement.
barleygirl

7 Years Ago

Since I haven't seen anything new over here in awhile, I decided to go back to my very favorite one .. read more
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Cyd
“…but she is smiling too, so it’s okay.” We’ve all been there. Grandma is a wonderful woman, I’m sorry she died, I’m glad all the creatures were there and that they are still alive. Maybe grandma is there now too in the “cellar”, I would like to think that, perhaps she’s a fairy godmother or such.

It was a nice little trip down childhood lane, before we get to the big intersection of growing up, but up to the left there’s a little path into the woods of nostalgia.

(PS. I might steal grandma, I didn’t have a grandma like that. Yeah, I just stole grandma.)

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Posted 8 Years Ago


Shannon

8 Years Ago

I love your take on this. I think this particular grandma would enjoy being shared... You are most w.. read more
Cyd

8 Years Ago

Thanks, tea with grandma it is :D
My goodness! This was absolutely delightful! I think your story telling is superb I can't wait to read more of you.

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Shannon

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much. It has been a great learning curve.

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