Leo's Plea

This is another song I wrote for my book. I wrote it actually for the second book in the series im writing but i just decided to go ahead and write this. So yea....

 

Like townspeople during a thunder storm,

Like a little girl waiting on the streets,

Like a mother carrying a child,

You are anxious

 

Like a child on a raining day,

Like a flower that can not bloom,

Like a mother who lost her child,

You are sad and crying

 

Baby, please,

Don’t give up on me.

Baby, please,

Don’t shed more tears.

Because I’m here

To make you happy

And that’s what I’m going to do,

If you’d just give me a chance to.

 

 

 

 

Like a teenage girl by the phone,

Like an hungry infant in a crib,

Like a cub trapped in a cave,

You are waiting.

 

Like a child in a dark room,

Like a tree in a forest of flame,

Like a mother whose child is missing,

You are scared and frightened.

 

But Baby, please,

Don’t give up on me.

Baby, please,

Don’t shed more tears.

Because I’m here

To make you happy

And that’s what I’m going to do,

If you’d just give me a chance to.

 

 

Little darling, you’ve been waiting and watching seeing if that love you had before will return.

Seeing if the one that loved you most will come on their accord safe from harm.

Well, sweetheart, they’ll come soon. But until then can you make room for me in your heart.

 

Baby, please,

Love me like I love you.

Baby, please,

Smile the only way you do.

I’m staying here with you.

To make you happy.

Because girl you drive me crazy.

 

Baby, please,

Laugh that rare laugh.

Baby, please,

Talk to me about it.

Because I’m not going anywhere.

I love you more than I love myself.

I want to make you happy.

Could you please answer my plea?

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

This is the second song I had ever written in my entire life so cut me some slack. Criticism is welcome!

Reviews

[Flo_writer]

The thing about a song is, you sort of need to hear the beat to know how it flows, what rhydum to read to it, It would help to accentuate the sequence of words and the way to read them. Too bad you can't embed Instrumentals here. That would've been great. However, I enjoyed reading...pretty good for just your second shot.

[Sinny]

i like it.....

[Doctor Deathstab]

I agree that it's a nice write. It took me a couple of tries to read all of it since my attention span is so small. I think I also have to be in a super mellow mood to read this stuff.

[Drifter]

I will say that I like this. You say that it is the second song you've written? Not bad. The section that begins with "Little Darling" is a bit off, at least to me. I think it would be good to have it, but polish it up so it doesn't throw off the rhythm. In any case, good start.