The Broken Silence

The Broken Silence


In the middle of night where stars I see
Sprinkled over the mountains , 
And a moon reflected on the sea,
Within this beauty of silence , 
And the breeze of a cold wind
I stood on this excluded island
And came across a dead end,
With a high glassy wall ,

I tried to climb but I had a tremendous fall
And as I struggled over and over to go higher,
I became worn-out and completely tired, 
No matter how hard I tussled ,
The result was still the same - I fell down,

So I looked around, no right nor left,

The wall is circled all around,
I had to find a way out, 
But doors were just shutting down,
While this silence is running within my vein,
For my voice will no longer be heard again,
And my freedom will never be regained,

All alone I’m wondering,
Would I ever see the light?
Will I ever stand up and fight?
Will I ever break this wall?
Will I ever stand high and tall?
Will I ever come to realize
That life needs compromise?

This beauty of silence has a dark place,
Where only pain and agony are embraced,
Where only thoughts of cuts and suicide,
Fill my entire mind,
But I don't want to die for sure
So I will break this wall as I scream and roar
I will crack it up through its biggest gate,
Make my way out then face my fate
I will go - Live up to my style,
While walking around with the biggest smile,
I will fight and wrestle till I conquer all,
With love I must help and catch whoever falls,
I will call for peace and sheath my sword,
I will call for love and spread the word,
I will live my life regardless of all
As long as I’m good and pleasing my lord.

Reviews

[Iris]

Wow. The last few lines had me enraptured. The good thing is, you managed to portray strength, fierceness and gentleness all in one stanza.
But I don't want to die for sure
So I will break this wall as I scream and roar
I will crack it up through its biggest gate,
Make my way out then face my fate
I will go - Live up to my style,
While walking around with the biggest smile,
I will fight and wrestle till I conquer all,
With love I must help and catch whoever falls,
I will call for peace and sheath my sword,
I will call for love and spread the word,
I will live my life regardless of all
As long as I’m good and pleasing my lord

Especially that last line. I loved it. It's one of the best lines I have ever heard in my entire life. And for that I thank you. Please keep writing.

[Salem]

thanks for taking the time to read my work..

[Coyote Poetry]

The below lines felt like a prayer. A needed prayer.
While walking around with the biggest smile,
"I will fight and wrestle till I conquer all,
With love I must help and catch whoever falls,
I will call for peace and sheath my sword,
I will call for love and spread the word,
I will live my life regardless of all
As long as I’m good and pleasing my lord."
Perfect words and thoughts in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Gregory Stires]

this poem perfectly displays the emotion perfectly, just by reading this i can feel myself connected to the emotions u are emitting while writing the poem and i love how this poem is just pushing u down but u keep getting up and not giving up on yourself even though the thought of giving up is in the back of ur head. and i love how in the last lines its shows how u will live ur life how u want to as long it as does no harm to no one and even yourself. overall this poem struck my heart and i think ive fond another favorite poem for me.

[Salem]

Thank you Gregory for taking the time to read my poem.

[Dak]

how at the end you got over painful feelings in the strength that is peace in love. great poem

[Salem]

glad you liked it

[Glenda]

Very nice poem. With the last line, you nailed it. Good work.

[Salem]

thanks ...............

[LapseOfMind]

Wow, great job! I don't consider myself a poet but you definitely are. Great read

[Salem]

thank you ..............

[Mai L Nissen]

I enjoyed reading this piece, a lot of despair, emotional struggle in the beginning that slowly turn into a journey of figuring out what you are made of, and in the end determination for what you believe to be right overcomes this struggle.

"Would I ever see the light?
Will I ever stand up and fight?"
These are questions of great peril for the one who faces the reality of having to ask them in the first place.
But here, a surge of willpower:
"So I will break this wall as I scream and roar
I will crack it up through its biggest gate,
Make my way out then face my fate
...
I will fight and wrestle till I conquer all,
With love I must help and catch whoever falls,"

The image of breaking free is very evocative and trustworthy, as reader you believe that there is nothing the speaker of the poem cannot conquer.

Thanks for sharing,
Mai

[Salem]

thanks, I really loved your comment. thanks again

[Pryde Foltz]

So I will break this wall as I scream and roar
I will crack it up through its biggest gate,
Make my way out then face my fate
I will go - Live up to my style,

A high energetic and inspiring piece, Salem. And that photo matched up with your words perfectly. A piece of verbal and visual art.

[Salem]

thanks >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

[Dipanjan Dutta]

Magnificent piece. Enjoyed it thoroughly

Dipanjan

[Salem]

thanx Dipanjan for your comment

[Wandervogel]

great piece sir....I liked it

[Salem]

thank you for you comment