A Girl Has Committed a Suicide!!

you see.. everyone of us has someone 
who are really precious for us and we think they are the one 

we meet, we kiss , and we make love
and you think within yourself this person is a gift from above

but all the sudden they disappear 
and you look for a reason but its not clear

you ask and wonder what has gone wrong ?
why didn't he call? why didn't he take me along?

why did he leave me in despair ?
why do I have to know that he is having an affair?

was not I good enough for him? probably because I wasn't smart
maybe I was not beautiful from the start 

Maybe this and maybe that ...
I think because I am fat... 

and you start taking diet pill
and know, your esteem is what you are trying to kill 

long days you girls have cried 
and the next morning we have to hear,
"a girl has committed a suicide"

"nobody cares about me" we found in your notes
the last note from you with blood you wrote

but let me tell you girls
no matter how you look like 
your beauty is of million pearls

nobody leaves you because you are not beautiful or smart
but he was not planning to be committed to you from the start

so you ran into the wrong guy
and because of him you had to cry 

so raise your head, you are a queen
stand strong and don't be lean

there are others wishing to be at your side 
you might not notice them 
but they wishing you to be their bride 

don't look down on yourself your are strong
don't throw yourself to guys who think of you as their belongs

don't reveal yourself to attract attention 
don't be a doll for a social conventions 

in this world you have to be wary
do respect yourself and do follow Steps of Mary

the best woman on earth god has mentioned 
about her goodness, none will come to dissension

Reviews

[NotaBene]

Absolutely beautiful! My favorite line here is "nobody leaves you because you are not beautiful or smart, but he was not planning to be committed to you from the start" Truer words were never said. I think that's a line all girls need to hear, because they are constantly searching through themselves to figure out "whats wrong with me?" "What did I do wrong." This was so emotionally compelling! Great job!

[Salem]

thank you so much Eliana, that is really meant alot

[Daisy]

it's wonderful.... all that complex reality u have placed here in few lines... amazing
Good job

[Chris]

Thought-full and caring content. A good and soft rhythm.

[Salem]

Thank you Chris,

[Edward Lancheister]

positive message, i like poem that bring enlightenment and courage people to look up not look down, keep straight not go stray. that reality fact should be. nice penned written. keep it up

[Salem]

thank you sir

[Kieta!]

True true, it's the guy that leaves that's missing out. Great job!

[Salem]

appreciate you read and comment

[MOON]

Like how you expressed this, often we meet with the wrong person for us and think it's our failings rather then the wrong person for us. Self affirming write.

[Salem]

thanx for reviewing my work