UNTITLED

What is it that you would you do
If past midnight,
You woke up; maybe at two,
Full of fright
'cause of a nightmare past
Of a ship with ruined mast?...

If the ship was likened to life
On it's maiden voyage in seas
Troubled and full of strife,
And winds like a dragon's hiss
Wiped out every single element of creation
Then existence was but GOD's imagination...

...what would you do?

Reviews

[M.Babu]

Great one!! Crap this was so good- the level of intellect woven into the core of the piece. The detail and eye to attention you injected into this amplified the authenticity and the wow factor...you killed this for me.


Great stuff bro!!

~M.Babu~

[Mockingbird]

this was excellent. almost a rhetorical question for me. great metaphor for life.that's great "then existence was but god's imagination.

Very haunting and poignant I like the dark thoughts you bring over here. It makes me think what I shall do.... Excellent.

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what a haunting write...and scary thought..

[Chris]

In the dream I'ld shout out in the exhuberance of the MOMENT... with sheer elation at having continuance AFTER such a wild and wonder-full ride!

and

In life, I would awake heart-racing, fast shallow breaths escaping, eyes WIDE yet still focused on the internal vision... and GAWD I would smile!

I appreciate my nightmares, I earned each and every one.

Chris

[Nastia]

i love it great work n amazin imagination!!! really take e reader into that world

[Ruth]

Beautifull woven love! The whole poem is engaging and really well thought out..and I love the way this is asking and describing...not telling...seriously makes the reader think! Brilliant! xoxo

[Raven Starhawk]

Well composed. Those words I write though this clearly deserves a better review. I was inclined to follow line after line as if it was leading me somewhere astounding. You write very well.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this poem. Poetry support to create thought and wonder. This poem did. I like the places you took me with the poem. I like the poem that end with a question like your poem did. Thank you for sharing the amazing poem.
Coyote

[bookworm]

I actually felt frightened by the end of this read! I like it when people put their dreams to words...such raw undisected emotion...you capture it well here. Nicely done.