REASON OR DESIRE?

Reason versus desire...

Is reason in phase with my desire?
When in my restless longings I aspire
To steer clear of life's mire?
When after the similitude of a raging fire
Desire sets out to acquire
All that elevates me higher
Does reason have to scrimmage and not tire
And warn of consequences so dire?
...or is desire  but a liar?

                        Sinde. 

Author's Note

Precise.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Desire is a two-edge sword. Sometime we want everything. When we have it. We learn too late we did not need it. The poem open the door to some good questions. Most of the questions are answered by living and hoping we are on the right road. I like the ending. Always good to end a poem with a question. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Linear]

Wow some aliteration here

well worded

And now it seems my friends are my nemesis in there endevour to vanquish the desire inside :0) just me playing with your words

[Ruth]

This is a balance and well written...I do like the way the flow works here, carried well love xx

[Brook]

Quick suggestions...

"All that elevates me the higher" - You don't need 'the' here. It flows better without it.

"...or is desire just but a liar?" -- In this case, 'but' and 'just' are synonymous. It's redundant to have both of them, so it would be better to eliminate one or the other.

I agree with Michael. I loved how you kept the same rhyme scheme throughout. It really helped the flow, and the description was wonderful. Very tantalizing. I think you did very well with word choice, consistently, throughout the entire thing. I especially liked the line "When after the similitude of a raging fire..." It was quite beautiful. Very nice.

95/100.

[M.Babu]

I like the rhyme scheme bruh...and how you made me questioning. Inspirational stuff right here plus your command over diction makes a fellow writer jealous. Good one!