A CHILDHOOD WITHOUT YOU

A Childhood without You

 

 

An atmosphere of unwelcoming

in the air and water and ground.

Protruding shapes of linear, angular and round.

Unkind gestures.

Inharmonious sounds. 

Expressions of spite of varying weights

and inconstant heights.

 

But there was a girl or perhaps a few

who loved me,  and shared

what little they had and knew.

Yet she in particular

did not - yearn for a colossal return.

 

So, these latter lines remain sublime

with regards to the interval of a previous time,

and my blurry memory of a girl

of primary age, who re-entered my thoughts

at this very life stage.

 

And when I’ve thought of her

I’ve also thought of you

and when I’ve felt affections of unfathomable magnitude;

I’ve returned once again to you,  

with my simple gratitude.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

By SH, 26^th Aug 2008

 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

This somehow reminds me of a great tide leaving a shore and moving away and away, leaving the writer marooned .. yet knowing, realising,that the tide will come back some time .. and does. Your use of words is almost fragile in this, a sadness, shadows, but then, there are those two last lines .. and they introduce yet another story but a much happier, safer one ..

[Anonymous Girl]

Its reminded me of my childhood and old times. :') really good use of words ^.^ wonderful

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I'm always pleased to recieve fresh new perspectives, thanks so much.

[Anonymous Girl]

My pleasure ^.^

[nigrum homonculus]

your wordplay completely amplifies the emotional message of the poem. a very sweet and honest write. well done.

[...]

. a very moving piece ...
. beautifully written ...

[MOON]

Lovely tribute . Love the way it flows.

[Norma M Sutton]

vague and almost sad. That is a hard kind of emotion to capture on paper. Well said.

[FJ Davis]

I'd criticize your hazy photo, but I display only a patch of grey.
Yours, Sheema, is a work of melancholy thankfulness--there is always beauty in that.
You write very well.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

FOR MANY OF MY GREAT FRIENDS.....

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I’m Sheema Huq, a London based poet. I love to experiment with styles, format and language and enjoy collaborating with different artists and mediums.
Please see more of my poetry on:
http://urbanpoetry.net/ShiftyShe.html and also,
http://www.Myspace.com/shiftyshedoespoetry