TEDIOUS TORMENTS

A Poem

                   

                    Time becomes an indelibly,

                riotous thief, a scoundrel for

                    notorious grief, as pneumatic

                drilling proceeds, out for the

                    killing, reaching an intolerably,

                heinous peak, insidiously, vacant

                    of relief, are such tedious

                 torments of one's own teeth.      

 

Author's Note

Reviews would be appreciated.

Reviews

[Great Aunt Astri]

Amazing vocablary. I like 'the pneumatic drilling' concept as if we are lumps of concrete. I did not know where your poem was leading until I got to the end. TEETH!!! But it could be a metaphore for one of the many problems in life that we are trying to sort out!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thank you so much!

[Edmund S. Obumba]

Time,
There's so much time but very limited to every person.Time gets annoying when you have so much to do but very little time.
Time can depress you when you can see your loved one dying and you cant reverse it.
I can relate.
This is deep.

[Dhaye]

Time is like a thief for when it passed away, you cannot bring back anything it taken from you...and would only be a torture when you regret.
Nice metaphors used.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thanks so much :)

[Bobbie Coelho]

This trips off the tongue and the truth neatly wrapped up.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thanks so much Bobbie.

[Tai Ryens]

Torments the teeth.. a nod to the natural decomposition of anything organic. You've portrayed the opinion that Time is the most devious of thieves very well, what a fine poem you've here. Keep it up Sheema.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thanks so much Tai

[Jack...]

Time may be a thief, but it always seems to place more in front of us to use as we like. Very cool.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thanks very much indeed.

[Hotwater]

Sounds like a visit to the dentist!... time doesn't care.

*bird*

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Certainly not! Thanks a million for this visit :0)

[Hotwater]

Hahaha!

*bird*

[L.Edward]

Wow. What away you have with adjectives. You weild them with great precision. Potent, beautifully constructed vignette.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hello Lee, your words mean a lot to me, I am pleased to have pleased with this vignette! Thank you.

[L.Edward]

You are more than welcome. Yes, very satisfied with this dose of Huq magic, indeed.

[SyberRose]

Yes time is a thief but not of memories...enjoyed Sheema...:)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Pleased to hear from you SyberRose, thank you very much indeed!