OLD BOOTS TRUDGE

POeM

                  These old boots,

                they clumsily trudge, 

            beholding a rancid grudge,

        mud ridden, crushed, trodden,

     damp wilted, fauna, curling, rotten,

  rugged ailing leaves, dying, forgotten,

  dry grey foliage, fading forlorn, sodden,

  destroyed laboriously, by heavy pouring,

    how wistful are these weeds of deviant

     wiry creeds, crammed with solemn

          jests of dire unease, intent only

            to torment,  to tease, then

                 utterly to displease,

                   odius, stubborn.

         

           

Author's Note

reviews would be welcome

Reviews

[Jack...]

Very cool format and the description of the old boots is spot on. If I may make one suggestion, and believe me I usually do not do this, but if you spaced twice at the bottom of your poem, then added a six line closing verse as wide as the widest part of your poem and as sqaure as you can get it, (like a heel print) then the visual aspect of your poem would really resemble a boot print. Just my thoughts, not to take away from your brilliant poem my friend.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I kind of thought that the shape resembled a leaf with the two ends cut off, so I decided to keep this shape, as I liked it. I also however really appreciate your suggestion and your advice, I do really like your idea as well, so nice to hear from you Jack, thank you again.

[L.Edward]

Sensory lushness. Just riding that old train of thought wherever it leads. Its very beat this one. Just taking in the intensity of the moment with great swaths of description that take in the bare essence of immediacy. Its quite Zen: taking objects in this way. Caressing them lightly with the mind. letting them rise from the primordial sea of the imagination like ripples then letting them sink back in again. Both part and parcel of the divine.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Well dear Lee, I always appreciate your perspective, particularly a Zen perspective and to compliment the content and then to compare this rather instinctive piece with Zen philosophy is most flattering, thank you very much!

[L.Edward]

Your welcome. Always great to hear from you.

[Adam Whitworth]

Boots is boots, I say give em a break.Thanks for the read request, thoroughly enjoyed it xx

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Gosh, lovely to hear from you again! Thank you :)