MELODIOUS JUMBLE

A jumbled word poem

Melodious Jumble

bothered  be I can

alert quite I am

since out dusk

gig from in just

of levitating twangs

diverse of fidgeting fans

hypnotic rhythms uncanny

warmth sweltering drifts

guitar down beaten rifts

to wanting  not retort

at children cheeky as token

scold  homes from  or broken

 

Author's Note

Reviews would be appreciated

Reviews

[Kristin Lee]

Very interesting. World jumbles are not my favorite format, but I enjoyed this one. I like how you used the red lettering in correlation with talking about sweltering heat. I also like how your poem was shaped like a guitar and you spoke about the hypnotic rhythms of your guitar. Very well crafted.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hi Kristen, belated thanks yous, for sharing your valuable views, I shall come by to reply to your read requests some time soon :)

[David Aiello]

It was excellent.
I read it three time to myself out loud just now, twice in earlier weeks.
That space, it felt like a concert;
whether or not that is in any way correct, I enjoyed it very much.
^___________^

(thank you for the read request!)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hi David, nice to hear from you again, thanks kindly.

[Firestone Feinberg]

Elegant, swift, imaginative, and easy to read. I love it. Thanks. David

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thank you so very much David

[Pax]

an intriguing feeling is felt... I love the shape... this poem gives a sad vibe... i like it my friend..

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Kind wishes Pax, thank you!

[Pax]

your welcome my friend...

[Dr. Wood ?]

loved it I.....showed imagination it....you thank

[SHEEMA HUQ]

my, oh, pleasure, reader, dear

[lee von cleef]

Fun to tie life together ,to pepper the words just so ...they hang on the edge of my mind... then they tumble into another thought and another till the bow is a whole, Tie made from a night on the town,So Ho Bound.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

An affectionate tribute, that was all bottled up and carbonated, shaken, not stirred and bubbling out of the bottle. The bottle shape reminded me of old milk bottles or cola bottles ( 30 to 50 years old and distinctly 20th C), as was this invaluable old relationship 20th C that is, which I briefly refer to, and certainly the music, which, in my experience, spurs profound emotions, nostalgia, and memories and even forms aspects of one's identity....thanks again Lee Von Cleef!

[Peter H]

i liked this very nicely written miss sheema :)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hello there, thanks Peter

[HeavenSunArcadez]

Loved it, but i adore all your work... this was very well creative and loved how u kept it original and unorthodox ... the first time i was reading I was reading for the rhythm and flow.... second time i was reading to have an understanding... it appeared to me as some sound or melody caught your attention as a concert of some sort, and you were just living it up enjoying the whole moment and experience.... hope im not too far off from your meaning, but loved it... great write..and kudos for originality

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hey there HeavenSunArcadez, I am truly flattered by your very generous appraisal, it is rare to receive such honourable praise, I am so grateful for your kind kind review!

[Zahra]

Interesting though couldn't understand much, but is really creative and the layout looks like a bottle if we observe...bottle of ketchup? :p thanks for sharing.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Glad for your review..... I was thinking that this was a liquid of some sort rather than a condiment, thank you, I have a Voice!

[h d e rushin]

reading this from bottom to top gives off a far different feel and obsorption. I like the idea, competency
rather than structure..
nicely written.
dana

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hello Dana, your thoughts are much appreciated, thanks very much.

[Tai Ryens]

The structure appears to house a particular figure, otherwise, I was entertained.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Pleased to hear this, thanks for your review Tai.