COMMA ,' APOSTROPHE

prose poem

Comma,’ Apostrophe

 

The penitent culprit used a comma instead of an apostrophe

whilst writing their admission  to the cause of a preventable,

minor catastrophe. To behaviours which were not acceptable

to oneself, let alone the whole of humanity. A regretful, guilt

engulfed adult, bewildered by their previous autocracy, was

once recruited  in to a state run bureaucracy. Failed attempts

were relentless in addressing their former perjury, in outwitting

their reckless bouts of  intense melancholy. A grown man with

an air of fragility, and a complex past, was to embrace all the

experiences of repentance and of healing to finally last............

Author's Note

reviews would be most welcome

Reviews

[Peter H]

from what i can gather this is a good piece based on ,a former swindler or someone who was once in government but then fell into depravity now he seeks to change his immoral ways.but this cannot be done easily because its become a disposition for him or her . good piece i loved it , you have a diction that is golden :)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thank you very much Peter

[Dr. Wood ?]

I cannot pretend to understand this poem at all but that is not to say I do not find it fascinating. Maybe of course THAT is the reason for my fascination...I will read it over a few times to see if I can actually come to the party....Great write

[emmajoy]

Rightly or wrongly, this reviewer finds this far more than a error of punctuation but more an error in judgement by both puppeteer and puppet, However, the points are more deftly and intellectually put than my late.night reasoning. You trap the mind into seeing more .. the art of a fine writer.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

One of those perplexing moral dilemmas, thanks kindly Emma Joy

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Stunning and witty very captivating :)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Nice to meet you Marc, thank you so much, so you know that the 'wit' element had not even occurred to me until reviewers started pointing this out, honestly wasn't intentional, though if this is apparent to a few, I don't mind, I was just slightly bewildered, best

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Welcome always :) yeah it is true sometimes writer is unaware about the potentials of her/his works. but your work is great and you deserved this attention :)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thank you, I am humbled b your words

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:)

[Sirius King]

'Gripped by guilt' is what I'm reading here. The carelessness of people with power and how it effects the world, powerful write!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Really I'm just aghast, so many positive responses to this little poem, thanks a million my friend

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Well Done! Keep it up! Do u read mine 2 TIME and MANNER..if possible then gives ur review.. U can also add me on facebook

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hi Gobinder, thanks so much for reviewing, of course I will return the favour soon

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Welcome

[Ency Bearis]

A witty profound poem. You had this tricky thoughts to uncover and such a mystery, great write.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thank you so very much Ency, I am pleased to have received such a positive review from you!

[Pax]

a short piece ~ intriguing ~ i feel the relationship of the two(Comma,’ Apostrophe ) and the mysterious writer(grown man) ~ they harbor the melancholy in their ink. that's all i get its highly intriguing piece!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

There is so much integrity in your reviewing process, which I really appreciate, thank you so very much Pax, :)

[Pax]

your most welcome :) ~ i enjoyed reading your work.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Really, It is an honour to have you review

[KAOlmsted]

I'm not even going to pretend I know what the hecks you're talking about *laugh* but I will tell you this...it was damn good. I almost got the sense it was about some higher up in a big corporation who mucked something up beyond repair and had to admit to it and, well, that you, my darling Sheema, were inspired to write this after perhaps reading the sworn statement of said higher up and noticing a typo...and, being the brilliant wordsmith you are, found THAT to be the greater offense.

Meh...of course I could just be projecting because that sounds like something I would do *laugh*

Thanks so much for sharing this with us. Always a pleasure to read your work.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Such a dedicated responses from you my friend on quite a grappling issue, yes the unfortunate cause of a minor/(major even), catastrophe, the most competent of bureaucrats may be inclined to initiating if they are the only decision maker at any given time, taking short cuts, losing their rag, under intense pressure or believing that their way is most appropriate, depending on the structure of the organisation and their position.....thank you so very much for this review, and you kind compliments, it is so good to hear from YOU!

[KAOlmsted]

Always my absolute pleasure!

[David Aiello]

I feel far too simple to give this any kind of intellectual appraisal, and so I will simply be honest.
I had to read it twelve times.
The first time left me feeling like I had been struck by lightning. By the eighth time, I had regained language and read it to myself out loud slowly a couple times, and by the twelfth time, I felt reoriented enough to type this.

I feel very much akin to the character in your poem, and perhaps it puts me too close to comment on it at all clearly. In such circumstances, I very much disapprove of selfish rambling, and so to critique, I will be brief.

I was moved.

thank you very much for the read request, I would have missed a life experience had I not read this.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Interesting I felt that you felt an affinity with the culprit, no knowing his exact actions and behaviours, which I might put down to my own biases in writing this prose, I am always fascinated by how my writing is interpreted and my underlying message is about finding long term measures to move on from what he had committed in a responsible and self-healing manner, I thank you so much David for stopping by and commenting so elaborately ( really useful to rad your thoughts).

[David Aiello]

^_______^ I really enjoy your work! that you find my perspective helpful leaves me feeling pretty happy, thank you!