MISSING HEAD

poem

 

 

 

My head felt like it had been took.

A worn and tattered old book.

Loose pages found in a nook.

Pecked and examined by a Rook.

An overburdened coat hook.

Banged about, twisted and shook.

Washed and deseeded, ready to cook.

My head felt like it had been took.

 

Author's Note

picture: Untitled by Andy Vibile

Reviews

[Balkaran Sidhu]

:) enjoyed this read....

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hello, thanks for commenting :)

[KAOlmsted]

As Frieda would say "And I don't give a fook" xD This was really clever...thanks for penning this quirky write...

[Sirius King]

This felt like the beginning of a song, like someone in a musical about to sing about going crazy lol. Another great on Sheema!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I personally like this one, it is nice to post light-hearted trivia to break up the general monotony I think, thanks so such dear Serenus

[L.Edward]

I dig how you take the words and just run with them to see where they end up. Has a Lewis Caroll feel about it. I might have to give it a go. I could do with a bit of nonsense. Thank you for the inspiration!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Oh you humble me dear Lee, you are Lee Edward right? I am looking foward to reading your masterpiece ( literally) which I shelved in my libary, earlier on today, again and again, thanks for sharing

[L.Edward]

Your welcome. Thank you for your kind words.

[Marie]

Didn't you know where to look?

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I think that the two reamining words of this rhyme scheme were, 'look' and 'stook', thanks for peering in and commenting Marie

[Pax]

wow ~ the rhyming is pretty great... i love it... it dances in my tongue as i read it out loud... now i felt like my head had been took..;)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hey Pax, I really appreciate your review

[David Aiello]

I really enjoy how the rhyme carries through the transformations of the story, and for whatever my feelings on it is worth, I find it well made and worthy of the triple-read;

[SHEEMA HUQ]

such a compliment, thanks kindly David, I feel blessed tonight :)

[roarke]

Naw, you're just hungry....

[SHEEMA HUQ]

promise, I'm not

[Wondering Mind]

mono rhyme is one of the most difficult structures (imo) to make work in the English language, compared to an Eastern language, such as Arabic, where mono rhyme would be music in words...but you've done well to make the case of the lost head :)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

thanks so very much, nice to meet you, I do admire your worldy poetic knowledge :)

[Wondering Mind]

you're welcome, a pleasure to meet you too, and I'm hardly knowledgable, or worldly..I haven't written in Chinese...yet Oh...and thank you for your reviews :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Not a fan of rhyming poetry unless subtle. This is a good attempt to describe feeling that you have been left stunned but it lost its pathos to me through the needless rhyme.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I am a rhyming freak! regardless, thanks