THE WAIT

POEM

  Slight, though, ominous,

self-conscious, motions

reluctant  flinches, restrained

implosions, as the shuttle

engine  expends a vast,

hovering noise, stomach

churns, grasping the seat

handles to exhale breath, to

clumsily re-poise, reticent  

though relieved, to finally

abandon land, to leave

following several denigrating,

drawn out, intensive, disturbed,

violations, inflating, heady

tensions, conflating scepticism,

senses over-driven with each

sneeze, shuffle & page turning

crumple, every minute

merged into, brutal

compounding complexities,

second by second

            verged on  crucial,

                               hampering perplexities...

                                        then at last,

                            TAKE OFF!

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

feedback would be most welcome

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was wonderful. It describes the varied emotions one might feel on a first flight; or ANY flight for that matter. My brother is a pilot. He's also an ex Ranger paratrooper who used to skydive but he has a fear of heights. He gets vertigo on a high ladder or in a balcony. It's crazy. But flying doesn't bother him or skydiving...

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Ah, I've finally found a way to reply, infact I went ahead and sent you a message, I so enjoyed your great review, with much thanks

[L.Edward]

Very atmospheric. Could cut the tension with a knife. Can taste the lifeless recycled cabin air. Long haul flights are like moving through a world between worlds, a parallell dimension, full of neon lit insomnia. You captured that vividly.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I'm always tantalised by your perspectives, thanks so much for this review

[L.Edward]

Always welcome. Thank you for the inspiration. The energy of your work always strikes a very resonant chord with me.

[demureminds]

I feel extremely anxious reading this... It's actually quite relatable to most of my experiences haha. Wonderful write.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thank you for such a set of lovely reviews Melinda!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

a whole lot of emotions ...a whole lot of uncertainty...
time is of essence...yet no minutes for self-pity
fasten your seat belt...turn off your cell phone..(air-hostess doin her duty)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thanks so much for reviewing poetry-kiddo

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

yes i am glad to review you

[Horizon K.]

This makes me feel like I'm sitting in the engine is a space shuttle as it begins to wind up, churning its complexities, burning it's fuel, Then that moment of liftoff... Nicely done!!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

a big thank you Horizon K

[therisa]

Although, I suffer from anxiety, sitting in a taxiing airplane, is not one of my triggers. For some strange reason, I find it, relaxing for me. Looking out the window and seeing the clouds, below. Go figure, this from a person, with a severe fear of heights.

But, I can understand, waiting is always the hardest part of anything, which you describe masterfully.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

your thoughts are always interesting to read, thanks a million for this super review

[therisa]

Your welcome, Sheema.

[Peter H]

it describes you on your first flight i wouldn't know i've never flown in a plane before but this was well written its was extremely wordy and imaged very well i liked it good poem

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hi, pleased to meet you, thanks for stopping by, I guess the style of this writing is quite crammy ( a deliberate measure to enhance the intensity of feelings), I a so glad that you liked, your persepctive is much appreciated

[Poetic Beauty]

Anxiety at its finest. Gotta love those moments and you used powerful words to describe what it is like to have this condition, which can be hard to describe.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

good to hear from you, much thanks

[asdarkeyesclose]

this was well described, take off is not pleasant (well i don't think it is anyway!) i thought your description of that clumsy landed plane excellent and that sense of foreboding as it takes off- although it usually turns out OK once you are up there! great use of language and nice original subject. fantastic.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

ghostofdawn, your reviews are just amazing, I am so grateful, a big thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

Creative and unique subject matter . A like the artistic aspect of it too...:)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

very good of you to comment Sami, thank you so much

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...Any time...:)

[Sirius King]

all of the tension and anticipation right b4 take off...i felt it all thru this piece

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I'm glad that this one resonated with you, means a lot that you have reviewed, thanks :)