AFTER THE RAIN

a poem

warmed by

sunrays,

mist rises

and escapes

in a canopy

of clouds,

pearly wisps of

meandering

vapours

enable a

multitude

of senses

to be aroused,

 

after the

incessant

teasing

of rain fall,

iridescent

beams of

sunlight,

through the

shrubs of

evergreen,

enshroud,

 

though,

peace in one’s

mind remains

unendowerd,

as festering

riotous

proliferations

of anguish,

halts focus,

then with

muddy

convictions,  

 

impetuously

confound

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

confound: confuses
impetous: spur of the moment

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

It seems the clouds came back; if not in form, at least in function. There is a dark gloom hanging over the ending. I always feel refreshed after the rain. I like to go out and hear the birds sing again. A soulful piece of music can sometimes be as cathartic as rain. I enjoyed the read.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

the cold calamitous, cloggy mud I'm afraid must have ceased the day, and I had indeed depicted a non-receptive frame of mind, though I agree with you about the cathartic role that rainfall plays - thanks so much, for your interesting comments Fabian!

[L.Edward]

Lucidly penned. Moments of sublime reflection amindst the lushness until those thorny vines of intellect strangle the senses. How the simple joy of nature can be harrassed by the overwrought mind. I know this feeling well.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Yes, indeed, catching a complicated moment in time, in one's mind, you have interpreted this experience brilliantly, thanks so very much for reviewing

[L.Edward]

Your welcome.

[Broken.Words]

nice write a hundred times better than mine :) and the coloring good too...~

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Please please my friend, never compare writings, It is so important to have a diversity of writers on this site, you are perfectly good, very nice to meet you and thank you for your kind review

[Broken.Words]

yeah you are right :) you are Always welcome

[Peter H]

wow this was great as usually u articulate your words and imagery very well , an impeccable piece with sublime imagery good write my friend

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Glad for your comments Peter :)

[InsanityWriter]

This is lovely. ;) The imagery was super!! :D Great work, I enjoyed.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thanks ever so much InsanityWriter

[Tai Ryens]

Evening has once again returned? I like to imagine rain as darkness falling in day. That very same thought was evoked by the idea of your poetry. 'Tis makes me articulate peering through the rain, only to see the clouds. Well done!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Much thanks Tai

[Dr. Wood ?]

impetuous spurs are the best and this proves that Sheema

wonderful poem

[SHEEMA HUQ]

thanks a million Dr Wood, for sparing the time to review :)

[Pax]

a spur of the moment ~ oh that's how we expressed ourselve... and that's what makes poetry more beautiful... and this piece is one of it....

the immense feeling of wonderings....
Great work my friend...

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thanks dearly Pax for your kind and encouraging perspectives, I truly value your reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Absolutely BEAUTIFUL!...the rain has such a profound cleansing...loved this write!

P.S. I loved the green colour...worked wonderfully with the theme and tone of this piece.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

thanks so much Robbie, useful feedback much appreciated as ever

[Robbie~xoxo~]

My pleasure... I enjoyed reading it. :)

[KAOlmsted]

I certainly hope the definitions you provided were not needed by any who read this beautiful piece of work...if they were it makes me weep for our education system (ours, yours, theirs) ;-) I love this piece, Sheema, its structure, its tone, its flow, from the very beginning all the way down to the rather melancholy end. Small bit, hardly worth mentioning, just a wee oversight, I'm certain, but I would be remiss if I said nothing. "sunlight, though the shrubs..." maybe "through"? All in all, I loved this. Thank you for sharing this with us, my dear friend.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

so glad that you liked, means a lot to me, thanks especially for pointing out the error, I love a good stickler for punctuation, see you soon, no doubt xx

[KAOlmsted]

Always my pleasure ;-)