CELLPHONECHIC

POEM

 

                         

         

automated hands,

   manicured politely,  

quivering....hesitant,

  prone to slightly fidget

before reaching

for the personal,

high fashion, high tech,

communication gadget,

this gleaming, high priority,

public show accessory,

was handled, as if it were,

a prime life force, as if the very

meaning of life itself, depended upon,

displays of, borderline professional, bravado,

often causing phone induced,

confined, solitary alienation,

shrouded with a suggestive

barrage of condemnations.

 

 

 

   

Reviews

[Paul Seaman]

the phone.
a portal
a window
through the soul of the user
to the victim of their desires..

the phone
a weapon
of mutual destruction
of the moment
we will never share
in peace...

the phone
an intent to be
with somone better
than you
intimately
in the
aire..


;-)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

thanks Paul for such a glorious post,
you might want to expand further and publish infact read morethanks Paul for such a glorious post,
you might want to expand further and publish infact
fascinating where our different minds can take us.....
:)

[Paul Seaman]

yeah, I might want to. It reminds me of a poem I wote over 30 years ago called plastic pleasures, obout my love of a cassette tape that had some songs on it I really enjoyed. But the truth was, I enjoyed the perfect lines of the tape case and its pretty color even more.. and I thought that was strange, and wrote about it..

[patricia]

I liked the ryhthm the end of your lines created...the pause effect that went on to give each little outcome. It actually came across as automated as if a machine was speaking which is the affect i think you were aiming at. Good work...and very true content.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

much appreciated Trish, I had not formally considered how the automated structure has created an automated tone and voice, thanks so much

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i love the write..just dislike modern technology...so much..

it parts us more than brings us together.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

aha, another review, pleased you liked Jacob, thanks v much, and yes indeed a line has to be drawn before we all pop off

[quinfinn]

it seems i am not alone in my assessment of the modern technology and the many ways it changes and modifies human behavior. this is profoundly resonant in its message. i absolutely adore this write! going to my library......

[SHEEMA HUQ]

hey Quinfinn across the oceon, this is such a pleasant suprise, I so appreciate your visit and most encouraging review, I'm dead chuffed that this is a favourite of yours also, Yipeeee!!!

[quinfinn]

glad i have "chuffed" you in such a positive way, love, hope everything is ticketyboo