SUMMER TREKS

Summer Treks

 

 

During her strident youth, she of the ground floor, flat 2, Belgravia, had trekked across specific regions of Europe, Africa and South East Asia.

 

Presently, she was entering the quaint civilisation of her Hungarian neighbour's 2ND floor abode for tea and impassioned debates about botany.

 

She felt a sense of pride regarding the typically international flavour of her ordinary local venture.

Earnestly she wondered why, her neighbour two floors below from Uruguay, who lived with the studious Syrian, spoke only with a voice so mild, & rarely ever smiled?

 

She felt more troubled by the friendly hairdresser of Maltese-Australian origin, living at flat number 7. The young woman looked bemused when questioned about whether she and her peers would stop their regular trips - on the conditon of causing harmful carbon emissions.

 

She grasped for breath and clenched her hands, carefully avoiding denture gritting, on hearing, of  the groups’ frequent low cost flights..... to Ireland, Europe, and the like. She failed to fathom, why they would not take the ferry, coach, hire a bus, take a train or hike?

 

Shuffling around, back at her flat with hasty disapproval, she eagerly regressed to fonder facets of her beleaguered childhood......the comfort of the times spent queuing for several wet hours with her sister and aunt to watch the Wimbledon lawn tennis, tournaments.

 

The cloth in her hand dropped suddenly, reminding her to continue dusting her souvenir ornaments.  

 

 

 

August 2012 sh

 

Reviews

[TLK]

I love prose poetry, and I'm glad I found this piece (I'm not sure if it's under the prose poetry definition, I gave up searching for those kinds of writing when nearly everything I was reading was not prose poetry at all).
There is some nice consonance with the s's that seems to run through a number of the paragraphs, but I first noticed it in the first one.
There is also some good internal rhyming throughout. In fact, I enjoyed these elements so much that I had to read it more than once, because the first time I forgot to pick up on the meaning of the piece.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

hi there, you're right, I think that one of the issues surrounding rhyming prose is that the rhymes can indeed marr the overall meaning behind the writing an the words can subsequently lose power. thank you for reading twice! I feel most encouraged by your elaborate comments! ciao!

[Cherrie Palmer]

your poem is well balanced and the prose reveal a life once lived, the voice of the poet lead the reader and this line is revealing and powerful...she eagerly regressed to fonder facets of her beleaguered childhood......

[SHEEMA HUQ]

i've pressed the right button this time, glad you liked this one Cherrie

[Cherrie Palmer]

you are very welcome :)

[MOON]

The melting pot so to speak, a lyrical write descriptive detailed and very interesting.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

thanks for reading, much appreciated comments, I shall be over to visit your page in the near future no doubt and I hope that you are keeping well.

[MOON]

Thanks Sheema , take care.

[Freedom's Child]

Your vivid imagery really brings this piece to life. Awesome job!

[sienikeha]

really interesting piece.

[Dr. Wood ?]

Well the last reviewer said it perfectly..such detail.. you paint a vivid and mesmerising picture here, I was THERE...I envy you this talent you have

[SHEEMA HUQ]

honestly i'm astonished and pleased by your response...i'm just still not overtly keen on this poem but reviewers tend to enjoy, i feel most encouraged.

[nigrum homonculus]

felt like i was going through some memories with you in this piece. it was well written and the detail was just amazing. well done. definitely up there with one of the best i have read on the site.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

no, not alot of faith in this one, you can never really tell, who will like what and which poems turn out to be popular, I never cease to be suprised, muchly grateful!

[Norma M Sutton]

A interesting glimpse into her thought process :)

[Cole Hayley]

I actually love the innocence of this. Its so timid but so deep.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

always interesting to recieve new interpretations, and i'm grateful for yours, stay blessed with your talents.

[L. Edward Neale]

Fantastic, I can feel myself there at the mantlepiece with you. The attention to detail and character reminds me a little of Ginsberg. When you mentioned Australian-maltese it made me homesick. I grew up in an area of Melbourne with a lot of greek, maltese and lebenese people. Living in homegoenous Japan I sometimes miss that ethnic melting pot.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

hey, that's an overwhelming staement, your eloquent reviews tend to overwhelm me with gratification and I just wasn't too sure about this poem...nice to learn a little more about you as well... all those many miles away, so an extra big hand of appreciation. thanks Edward!

[L. Edward Neale]

Your welcome! Thank you for your support too.