a wish

I wish when i walked in a room,

or down the street

men would look and smile

thinking"what i bautiful woman"

instead of turning away

thinking "why did i look?"

i wish girls who saw me

thought "i wish i looked like her"

instead of "i'm glad i'm not her"

i wish when people wispered as i pass by

"whats her secret"

"where is she from"

instead of

"what happened?"

"what went wrong?"

i wish people saw a woman

not a forgotten shell

chopped hair

mixed ragged complexion

but proud things i do so well

and the things i cary on my shoulders

as accomplishments

and rememberance

i wish i was a woman

who people saw

and said to themselves

"i wish i was her"

Reviews

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I like this, you have captured what many think.
The most important thing tho and I'm sure you know this
Is to be your own best friend, and to love yourself... It took me a long time to figure that one out,but since I have my world seems to be changing
We have the power inside to create a better world to live in...sorry, I'm rambling
I really liked this, great job!

[Kim]

Such a sad story that I think many woman think. I like the way you wrote this but I do want to point out a few spelling errors. In the line what a beautiful woman you have what i bautiful woman. wispered is spelled whispered and cary is carry. I'm not the best speller myself but it does make a difference when reading a poem, you don't want to take anything away from the content.

[Karina]

aww this is well written but i wish you didn't feel that way. you're gorgeous and fun!!! and rad, while i'm using the adjectives here. :]

wow it took me a while to figure out where this review box was. i read your other stuff but didnt know how to post anything about it! pretty much, its really cool reading it because its all so personal. I MISS YOUU