Minder

The creature lay in the garden, quite peacefully, really. 

I would have watched if my pant legs weren't shredded, excreting blood through seams all too visible. 

The doorknob gave a big clang as I drove my other side into it in hopes of venturing into the next room. 

In front of me lay a large lamp, knocked down, but still lit. 

"Oh, god!!!", I screamed. I felt the blood vessels squeeze and squeal, all too real, throughout my body. 

The bones I once thought to be so secure, now wriggled free for a second. 

Then my mind. 

My body, in the bad shape it already was, paused. Thoughts of dashing young women danced through, their half naked bodies enlarged in my minds eye, but then just as soon as they came, the very life of them no more. The creature was inside and I doubt it was coming out. 

Author's Note

Not a typical write from me, but nonetheless, I hope you enjoy it.

Reviews

[Relic]

Being I like a good horror story, I like this. I just don't understand the second paragraph?

[Spencer Barker]

Well thank you, Relic. The second paragraph, I must confess, was written in a rather odd mood. I wanted to try something different, but perhaps it doesn't quite work.

[Relic]

Thoughts of dashing young women danced through, their half naked bodies enlarged in my minds eye,"read moreThoughts of dashing young women danced through, their half naked bodies enlarged in my minds eye,"
Perhaps if the story was longer the sentence above would seem a little more credible and not so vague.

excreting blood through seems all too visible. (did you mean seams?)

This is still a good story.

[Spencer Barker]

In a way, I wanted to include something the character wouldn't usually think about (especially at the time) giving into the idea that the creature had entered his mind at that point.

[Relic]

I think my last comment got cut off. What I said was if the story was longer perhaps the sentence above would be more credible and less vague. Second line: did you mean seams? This is still a good story.

[Spencer Barker]

That is true. I did, actually; good eye. Thank you. :)