ENEMY

The enemy i never saw coming....Chris.......dushbag

ENEMY

 

How could i see what was coming

from an adversary as subtle as thee

U bided ur time and waited patiently

Just so you could steal my love from me  

 

I tried to be nice

I was even mean 

after all i tried to do for you

all you could do was deceive 

 

U took everything from me

my heart my love 

my very being 

and my only way of life  

 

Now i see you clearly now

you are my mortal enemy

forever will i hold this grudge

until she comes back to me 

 

as for you death will never come quick as long as i live 

the hate i hold for you will never fade

no one else will take you to your end

for i have your fate especially reserved for me   

 

For you are my mortal ENEMY

 

   

 

Author's Note

I will write the story for this soon so dont judge until i have the adequate time to write it. only then will you understand if you dont already.

Reviews

[Crystal Mullings]

"I tried to be nice

I was even mean "

I love this line! Its a satire almost as if you are ridiculing the person you tried to be nice but I was even mean.

[Colleen C Dunphy]

It is a good poem, but the U and the UR greatly detract from message.

[babygirl hernandez]

i like this alot. it shows true love being broken. which has happened to me alot. this poems means alot to me. it is very good

[Manley]

Dude I love it,
I know exaclty who your talking about
and I feel the same way about alot of people
just not in as deep of a hatred as you

[Succubi]

The hatred expressed in this poem is so real...its f*****g awesome =)
I love the rage, bitterness and anger expressed in this poem because it was expressed so well
nice =)
~Wrath~

[Lexy]

What's not to understand? Now, this poem, did you try to start out as rhyming? In the first stanza, and maybe in the second, you rhymed. It seemed like you gave up. Was that intentional?

[Berserker[Diktator Von ..]

I like this piece because some of us (me) have had this happen to us, and know how it feels...Thanks for writing this piece I enjoyed this, especially since this is all too real for me.Keep up the good work! =)

[The Mad Prophet]

The poem expresses it well. The hate over someone the you did so much for. He took everthing you treasured away, and by the sound even your habbats. I like the poem, let me know when you have your story up, I would like to read it.