untitled

I'm determined to do my acupuncture

here in your bed

its too dark we are too naked

en cauling every bit of my reality

desperate to  revert back

to the girl I (you) loved

with a heart and body,still unscathed

(you are my first)

Reviews

[paul]

unscathed' - great word

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I'm against acupuncture. I believe there are far too many pricks in the world as it is!
But I love your little poem...it clings to innocence...not lost, but misplaced...you will find it in your heart...go then, now, and look.

[Khaaki]

Powerful words... i am amazed .as usual...

[Sel Whiteley]

A very poweful poem expressed with a great economy of words.

[Emily B]

your words are growing taller every day . . .

[Another Relic]

Acupuncture! Ha Your so clever. A nice poem of innocence lost. I like it.

[Siddhartha]

Ah, innocence! The title does justice to the universality of the poem.

[paul]

'too naked' - great line
what a beautiful touching poem

[Emily B]

so young, so young, a child still in many ways, wanting to wrap back up in the innocence of youth, I am too, some days