night night

I love the daytime and the sun, but I also adore being up at night.

Here’s to those irresistible hours

The ones between zero and six

To their smooth and sexy ways

Keeping us up with cunning tricks

With their unmistakable silence

Or walks in the chilling soft breeze

The time to enjoy nature’s sound

From barking dogs to whispering trees

 

Here’s to dark rooms or rebelling lights

To candle lit rooms where shadows swing

To reading, to partying, to just staying up

Then regretting it when alarm clocks ring

And, of course, to night creatures tapping

On the window with increasing delight

Cheers to those labelled ‘insomniacs’

Cheers to those who love the night

Author's Note

I am quite open, and thankful, to any criticism whether the constructive kind or the "this sux" kind, although the first is more helpful :)

Reviews

[Sean Allen]

Ah, the first thing you have done right is to ask for criticism. That is the sign of a good writer. As my high school teacher, Warren Smith (WASM) said to me a couple of years ago... Revision, revision, revision... I was his student almost 50 years ago and we still keep in touch and I am still learning.

I would suggest that you don't bother with the 'How to write poetry' books,' as Robin Williams explained so well in "Dead Poets Society," and write what is in your heart just as you have done here in this lovely poem that creates a beautiful image on the night.

Two little techie things... avoid repeating the same word too closely (rooms) when another word can be used except for emphasis as you have done (Cheers)
SA

Oh, one other thing Smith said last year... regarding the importance of punctuation in poetry, and how it helps the reader navigate the poem… “Periods are like Stop signs, Commas are like warning signs telling the reader when to slow down”

[Ed Hart]

i miss the see, too...the night i visit every day

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... ah ... i am an absolutely night person ... it's around 3 am here in india ... so i just love your verse ... it is simple ... elegant ... eloquent ... and ... expressive ... "irresistible hours" ... "smooth and sexy ways" ... "dark rooms or rebelling lights" ... "shadows swing" ... "night creatures tapping" ... are beautiful expressions ... they certainly make the night come to life ... and ... of course ... "cheers to those who love the night" ... :) ...

[S.G.]

Thanks Haifa :) I do read more than I write actually, that's true. Thanks for the lovely comment.

[Haifa]

Its a lovely poem, I was surprised that you wrote only one poem and its really great one. Please keep writing.
Well done,
Haifa